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WarrenLuther04 replied to the topic "Bloody Hands" in the forum Critiques 7 years, 7 months ago
@allison-grace I’ve read some of it; I’m liking it so far! It’s intriguing…. :} 😀
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Audrey Caylin replied to the topic Fantasy prologue in the forum Critiques 7 years, 11 months ago
@allison-grace oooh, I really liked it! The pacing was quick and the entire prologue grabbed my attention. The length was perfect too.
Besides what @sarah-inkdragon said, here are my thoughts:
– the POV was a little confusing. I had a feeling it was from Joshua’s POV, but at the start, it felt omniscient (or all-seeing), and the transition was a…[Read more]
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Sarah Inkdragon replied to the topic Fantasy prologue in the forum Critiques 7 years, 11 months ago
So, here are my main points about your prologue:
- Length/Pacing:
It’s quite long, but the story doesn’t drag down in any places or become repetitive. In fact, I would say for what you’ve written, the length is nearly perfect, and along with your excellent pacing, it holds up nicely.
- Prose:
I like your prose. While it doesn’t…[Read more]
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WarrenLuther04 posted an update 7 years, 12 months ago
@allison-grace KANAN!!!!! *tears up* Hey, Spectre Seven! Your friendly neighborhood Mando ENFJ-T golden retriever here!
How’s KP and SE been while I’ve been gone?
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Hi, @warrenluther04 !!!! I’m almost done with Rebels. I only have the really long final episode left. I cried when we re-watched “Jedi Night”. It was horribly awesome. As in, it was just the way Kanan should have died – saving the others. I will read your fan fiction whenever you want!
*fist bump to my awesome Mandalorian golden retriever*
SE is…[Read more]-
Great! 😀 That final episode is awesome. I’m warning you though, the ending is amazing! I did too. Yes, he is the ultimate hero! He is such a great Jedi! Yay! I’ll post it whenever I end up finishing it.
*accepts fist bump with paw* *wags tail*
Yup it is. Aww, that’s too bad. I’m keeping on KP as long as it is on the Net. It is, sadly. I need @snap…[Read more] -
*gives you dog treat* Don’t go chasing my pet loth-cat. XD
I will miss the KP videos. They cracked me up.
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*accepts dog treat* *nods dutifully* I won’t. I like loth-cats! (Unless they steal my stuff) *growls*
I will too…. 🙁 😐
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Sam Kowal replied to the topic Hello all! in the forum Introduce Yourself 8 years ago
@allison-grace 😀 Somehow there needs to be a hollow lightsaber. And it goes inside your flute. And then when stormtroopers invade your music practice, *bam* you have a glowing lightsaber.
😀 Welcome to Story Embers, and great to have you here! The premise/synopsis of your novel sounds really interesting. Avendor is a great name
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