@abrielle
Active 2 years, 9 months ago-
Abrielle replied to the topic Hello there! in the forum Introduce Yourself 3 years, 2 months ago
Hi Olivia! I’m Lydia, I’m relatively new here. What is the Witche’s Owl about? I have a couple stories in the works, one fantasy and one sci-fi. I’m very torn about which one to focus on. Have you finished any novels before? I’ve only gotten through a full draft of one, and I’m procrastinating on the revision.
I also love…[Read more]
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Abrielle replied to the topic Teen Writers in the forum Writers of Children's/Middle Grade Books 3 years, 2 months ago
Hi! I’m Lydia, I’m currently seventeen. Do you have a current project? At the moment, I’m torn between a couple things; a sci-fi and a fantasy, both somewhere in the YA/children’s area. What’s your favorite part about writing? For me, I really love my characters. It’s so much fun playing around with them, watching how they interact, and…[Read more]
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Abrielle posted a new activity comment 3 years, 2 months ago
Cool! Well, my email is globetrotter12406@gmail.com. Question, are you looking for feedback? If you are, what kind of feedback?
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Ummm….I think it might have just sent you an email that just has your name…Sorry, I don’t know what I was doing but anyways…you should now have access.
Yes, I am looking for feedback. What kind? Your kind. I have a reader who I email that usually notices how well I explain things and worldbuilding, another one I email who gives me various things.…[Read more]
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Abrielle started the topic Short story in the forum Sci-fi Writers 3 years, 2 months ago
Hi guys! I recently finished a short story (though it is technically a little long for a ‘short story’). I was wondering, would anybody be willing to give me feedback on it? If your willing to read it but don’t have time for in-depth criticism, my big question is, is it worth turning into a full length novel?
Well, here goes.
Crow
The…[Read more]
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Abrielle started the topic Short story in the forum Fantasy Writers 3 years, 2 months ago
Hi guys! I recently finished a short story (though it is technically a little long for a ‘short story’). I was wondering, would anybody be willing to give me feedback on it? If your willing to read it but don’t have time for in-depth criticism, my big question is, is it worth turning into a full length novel?
Well, here goes.
Crow
The…[Read more]
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Abrielle replied to the topic Characters who are causing headaches right now. Help! in the forum Sci-fi Writers 3 years, 2 months ago
Hi. I’d write with advice about Nahim, but I honestly don’t know the answer. However, I still wanted to reply, if only to let you know that people hear. So . . . I wrote this. Also, I know it doesn’t convey the half of the comfort you need, but I’m so sorry about your Grandmother.
When I was younger, my family lived in China. We were mission…[Read more]
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Abrielle replied to the topic Hi! I’m new! in the forum Introduce Yourself 3 years, 2 months ago
Hi! I’m Lydia. Is this your very first story? What’s it about? How far have you gotten in writing it? I’ve been writing for about five years now, but I only recently finished my first full length story, a kids book about djinn triplets who attempt to kidnap a princess. All four wind up getting lost in the desert and must find their…[Read more]
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Abrielle posted a new activity comment 3 years, 2 months ago
Sure! Is it your complete first draft? Do you need my email? Thanks for asking! I look forward to reading it!
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No, it is not my complete first draft, that is all handwritten and…well in a few words I was figuring out what writing really was at the time. Not my best and has some HUGE outdated mistakes. i have the second draft up and typing but also in writing so, if I do show you handwritten, it will be the second draft from my digital notepad in my fast…[Read more]
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Abrielle posted a new activity comment 3 years, 2 months ago
Fun! I like.
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Abrielle posted a new activity comment 3 years, 2 months ago
Hi RAE! I have returned. I shall now proceed to pepper you with suggestions good, bad, and downright awesome. (Teasing. I promise I don’t actually talk like this in real life.)
Anyways, about Grathmere. There’s always the standard ‘badguy turns good, saves goodguy, and dies’ trope. However, I’m not sure that this trope would really make much of a…[Read more]-
Grathmere is a hard character to read. He’s a Wondian Nameless Thing making a little harder for me to put on my Character Cloak. He has never tried to kill Leahae, and she didn’t even know he was such a monster until he was defeated for a while my Alpha and the other Assassin Clones. He has almost killed Alpha more than once, on purpose, but I…[Read more]
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Abrielle replied to the topic Character Castle 2.0 in the forum Fantasy Writers 3 years, 2 months ago
Also, sorry. I noticed we had a theme going for the fashion show and I totally ruined it. Apologies.
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Abrielle replied to the topic Character Castle 2.0 in the forum Fantasy Writers 3 years, 2 months ago
No problem! I just got back from a summer camp, so I’ve not had a whole lot of time either. What all are you up to this summer?
Also, Rhianna’s speech was great. It was spot on.
Mara seems like fun. She and Rhianna should get along great (rather, they won’t, but it’ll be great anyways🙃).
Denari
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Abrielle posted a new activity comment 3 years, 2 months ago
😃
He’s a great author. Be warned though, the third Mistborn book gets a little gory and all three are mildly depressing, but also REALLY GOOD.
Honestly, my personal favorites are the Rithmatist and Skyward (which I just reread for, like, the fifth time). -
Abrielle posted a new activity comment 3 years, 2 months ago
HA thank you for mentioning backstories, I just realized that literally only two of those characters have them. This is still a relatively new story. Also, I made a conscious effort not to make sad characters, who are the ones that really need those. Something to work on!
How many brothers do you have? Do any of your siblings write? I have two…[Read more]-
I have two brothers and no sisters, none of whom write. I have no idea where I got this love for writing since no one that I know of in my family does. I have to write things by hand first either on paper or on my digital notebook from the company Mobiscribe, I just have to write it in good ol’ cursive too since my print has some of the worst…[Read more]
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Abrielle posted a new activity comment 3 years, 3 months ago
Rants are welcome! Hey, your plot sounds good! I have a habit of coming up with a million characters, half a dozen story lines, and then trying to smoosh it all together. You can probably guess that it doesn’t work great. For example, my novel work in progress (though I have a short story I have to finish first):
A. Rhianna, the Loki, is an…[Read more]-
That is comforting that rants are welcome because (beware) Ru Eis has a lot of rants she can cast forth.
Your story sounds intriguing. I’m curious who these people are and their backstories.
I’m a fan of backstories and that is where my plots often come from. For Guardian Angels, when I figured out the fact that his family was dead and how it…[Read more] -
Ru from the now present just poking something in. A common sample of Igua’s slang is, “The effe (ef-ee) woul’e dest.” Translation: “The effect would be devastating.” Now you can see why his Cloak Circle BEGGED him to learn how to speak normally!
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Abrielle posted a new activity comment 3 years, 3 months ago
Hi Rae! Igua sounds like an interesting character. Random thing, but I’m very curious about the aversion to butterknives. Has he got some kind of tragic history involving them?
Also, about him and Skullcrusher, could you throw them into a bit of trouble together? Make them learn each other’s languages under stress and by necessity, if that makes…[Read more]-
Igua does have a tragic past as Nahim does, his father was a Cloak but his mother grew up and raised him in a little town where he got his strange accent and his awful habit of slang. When they get into full swing it’s called another language but hey! It’s faster to say stuff. His mother supported her husband but never became a Cloak. When his f…[Read more]
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Abrielle posted a new activity comment 3 years, 3 months ago
Why not? If you post them, I’ll read them. I can’t promise to always posting feedback though, next week I’ll be pretty busy and may not be able to keep up.
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Thanks, though I might not post the 2nd chap for a while since it needs some work which I’ve got to do but after that I’m up to chap 4 in typing and chap 10 in writing. Thanks Abrielle, your replies and words give me courage.
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Abrielle replied to the topic music to write to in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 years, 3 months ago
Cool! I’ll have to try those. I find that having music that’s the right mood for whatever I’m writing really helps me to get through the scene. Thank you!
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Abrielle posted a new activity comment 3 years, 3 months ago
Hi Rae! I haven’t really ever offered criticism on other people’s writing before. Apologies in advance for anything that comes across as too harsh.
First off, I like it! It’s a cool idea. For some reason, I’m getting Mandalorian vibes (do you watch Star Wars? ).
However, it does feel a little wordy. Would it be possible to get outside of the…[Read more]-
Thanks, I need all the help I can get. My big brother (C) thinks the lego sets are cool for star wars and I have watched some of them. Realn are not my version of Mandalorians though, the Fettians which C made up to be way cooler and worse for storylines (He likes making me figure out how to make up a good story, he likes thinking up the coolest…[Read more]
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Abrielle replied to the topic Hello. in the forum Introduce Yourself 3 years, 3 months ago
Hullo Ru! Kudos on finishing your first draft of a story! I didn’t do that until just last year. How’s revision going? I probably ought to be revising, but I don’t really know where to start. I’m just so fond of the first draft, you see, despite it’s glaring problems.
Do you enjoy reading? Ah, I just found your profile page. I highly…[Read more]
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I do enjoy reading but only because of Tolkien. I hated reading until I read the Hobbit and then I realized books are interesting! I started the Silmarillion but about halfway I had to stop to read for school and cannot find my place. I remember quite a bit IF I jog my memory. I would like to emulate Tolkien but yet make my own style so I’m not…[Read more]
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