@abrielle
Active 2 years, 5 months ago
@rae
Hi! I’ve finished what you’ve written so far, and it’s pretty good! It certainly doesn’t drag, which is great. I think the biggest thing I have is that you tend to be a little wordy. Particularly with trying to throw too much information into one sentence (totally understandable, it’s really hard not to when you’re trying to introduce […] View
