Selah CJW

@this-is-not-an-alien

Hi Cathy,

Absolutely. Here is the essence of what is happening, as the Apostle Paul writes to the Corinthian Christians:

So then, dear friends, since we have these promises, let us cleanse ourselves from every impurity of the flesh and spirit, bringing holiness to completion in the fear of God. … For even if I grieved you…

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Oooh that’s a good analogy!! Like how Christ takes our sinfulness and turns it into something fruitful and something that results in a great good, like how He allowed the Original Sin and turned it into the story of His Love to the point of dying for us. And that they continue to ritualistically cleanse the city especially because it’s a con…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy

Rose,

I love that yellow dress analogy!  Subtle interplay of hope. Very well done!  Nice finishing touch having Faye completing it. Bravo!

@this-is-not-an-alien

Cathy,

It goes even deeper than that, because when the remnant survive the plague, they purge the city by burning the outer rings, and courtyards, and they f…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world
It’s so interesting how the city is literally rotting from the inside out with corruption! That’s really cool symbolism!

Rose your symbology of the Blood representing the duality of “guilt” and “sacrifice” is a powerful analogy, and the fact that these images and experiences come from Liorah’s dreams are also portentou…

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@obrian-of-the-surface-world
Ooh I love your symbolism with dead city of Azragoth, it’s got so many layers and demonstrates how passive we are about the sins right in front of our noses while we judge distant crimes we may not be a part of physically but are in our complacency. Especially how unconfessed sin grows and wounds and eventually d…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy
@this-is-not-an-alien

Hi Rose and Cathy,

Thank you Rose and Cathy for sharing your amazing examples. I have many examples of buried symbology in my WIP that are expounded upon and revealed later in the story.  The very place of “The Mid-World” and the Hidden Kingdom referred to as “Excavatia” all have this buried and later…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

Very cool topic! I love your use of subtext to imply the danger in the piece! It’s really interesting!

@this-is-not-an-alien

In my current WIP I keep using the image of a doll both to forward the witchcraft underlying plot and to symbolize manipulation or someone being dehumanized and I also use the word “doll” to…

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YOU RANG? *heheheh*
Oooh I love that clip of Chicago! Gave a perfect image of everything interesting, and kept a rather dull plot (some dude waking up in the middle of the night to normal ol’ Chicago gunshots :D) vivid and punchy and promising excitement.
I have several ways I use subtext. In my current WIP I keep using the image of a doll both t…[Read more]

@erynne

HI Erynne,

Oh, definitely! Yes!  If you are just starting out, in the preliminary drafts, you have to put “Mr. (or Mrs.) Ick” in a box, or lock it in a closet and dump clothes over him/her to muffle the sounds of his/her protest at being kept from being allowed to criticize your writing.  Critiques come later, and only when they have b…[Read more]

Anddd I forgot to tag you again *facepalm*

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

Wow, I’m pretty sure you helped me more than I helped you…oops XD

That is a pretty good one!

You’ve got internal thoughts of the MC. You’ve set up a degree of loss, feelings of failure, disappointment, contrition, and an odd juxtaposition of her mother and sister as spectators in her prospective torture and death.  You’ve introduced tensio…

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@erynne

Good evening, Erynne!

Thank you for your response! Delighted to have you join this topic and discussion.  No need to apologize for the delay.

I totally understand. Today was a busy day for me too.  Sorry, I am so late getting back here to your reply. (writing this at night)

You wrote:

That is a pretty good one!

You’ve got int…[Read more]

Hello Brain! Thanks for tagging me! Sorry about the delayed response though, I’ve been busy with work work and work here at home…

Anyway, I am still in the process of plotting out my suspense novel, but I have had this opening line thought out for months. I haven’t told it to anyone so it might be absolutely awful on paper rather than in my…[Read more]