Kate Lamb

@daeus-lamb ahhhhhhhh, yes. I needed that.

Wow…

*high fives all around* Good job guys. Erekdale had the better story but I’m still proud of ours. Onward! We can only go forward from here. 😉

YES!

@daeus-lamb

@daeus-lamb you got this.

*slow grin* I. Likey.

Okay. *cracks knuckles* The big thing that’s standing out to me that we probably need to work on is Anthony. Not Anthony as a person, but Anthony as a story-thread. Most especially, I think we probably need to set him up as suicidal. Introduce that element as early as possible, to give the end maximum impact and also to…[Read more]

@Daeus-lamb ack ack ack, almost perfect. The last part is disjointed. Perhaps if you changed it to ‘The God of Manna has reigned for millennia and he does not take rebellion lightly… but the world needs a savior. And if Mortristan doesn’t find a way of escape, he will too.’

@daeus-lamb perfect.

@daeus-lamb will you be able to shoot for this, or shall I begin it?

@daeus-lamb I feel like you can probably take out the line about his father’s death. It’s a good hook, but it doesn’t carry over emotionally into the rest of the blurb.

It’s possible you may be trying to cover too much ground. You have three emotional threads running in your two paragraphs– his father’s legacy, his fiancee, and the broken…[Read more]

@Daeus-lamb you should. Speaking for myself I don’t think I could do it justice. 😛

@daeus-lamb that… could be totally awesome.

HEY GUYS. IT’S ME. I WILL BE JOINING YOU.

*proceeds to act as though she didn’t just fall off the face of the earth for a while there*

I like @Daeus-lamb‘s idea about the commentators, but let’s see if we can hash out some plot/character details before we make any serious stylistic decisions.

What are some things NOT to do? What’s the biggest…[Read more]

@daeus-lamb I give up. XD

@brandon-miller also has great points.

Mortristan was startled by his father’s death.

He is left with only two things: the governorship of Elysigard and a challenge from his father… find something worth living for. But it isn’t as easy as it sounds. Elysigard rests securely in the iron grip of the God of Manna— an unseen god who demands great sacrifice in return for food and p…[Read more]

@Eden-anderson wait, he’s supposed to be paying me??! Rats… I coulda been making money…