Mr.Trip Williams

Haha! great job! that is such a Ku reaction. Sorry I didn’t include it in my post… I was writing my post while you were posting, so I didn’t see it until after I posted mine… hope that’s okay.

haha. sorry. dichotomy means two things that are in contrast. usually, big brother characters are side characters, not the main protagonist… though there are exceptions. so I just used dichotomy to highlight that although he is the protagonist, he is also the big brother character of the story.

haha. this made me laugh.

Abirami

Ku was…[Read more]

haha! so do I!!! Let me know if you find one!

You know, I wondered that myself, but at the same time… I didn’t change it because the young buck circled the ground at its feet, but it also circled the ground where the saliero’s feet had just been……. so if it is read one way or the other, I figured it was still accurate….

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hahaha. I like him!

Ha! That’s awesome. I wasn’t sure, but figured it would be fun to play them off each other since their personality is kinda similar (on the pessimistic side)

ha. thanks! He fixed what he broke 😉 I like him too. I tried to pour everything you’d want in a big brother into him… which is an interesting dichotomy, since…[Read more]

(just a reminder of Ku’s personality, so you don’t end up completely hating her after this post… she grew up orphaned in the slums. She is very rough around the edges and has trust issues (but adores Abirami, though she tries to hide it, even from herself sometimes) and she plays dirty… very high survival instincts and a bit…[Read more]

I whole-heartedly agree

sounds great!

something else that may be worth mentioning is that there is a very big difference between descriptive and prescriptive.

I think a lot of the history in the Old Testament is a good example. Many, many stories in the Bible are descriptive – what happened, not prescriptive – what is good. And we can confuse the two very easily. For instance, the…[Read more]

Oh, it’s a far cry from a zombie. I was just using it as an example.

I can understand Brian’s aversion to zombies, and I won’t push the point, but your creature doesn’t sound like reanimation or bringing the dead back to life, but nano-technology taking over a person, which could easily change a person’s personality, the way they think, and…[Read more]

@joelle-stone

wasn’t sure who else to call out to, but I remembered you did ask to be updated if I posted another section… This one isn’t too emotional, like the last one, but hopefully a bit of fun…

@obrian-of-the-surface-world, I took @storysmith ‘s venom scenario differently

A few drops = paralysis and infection leading to slow death

Small doses = death

Medium doses = death and reanimation into feral, mindless creatures – but not Kragvora.

Large doses = death and reanimation into a full-blown Kragvora.

I’ve seen zombie movies do this…[Read more]

@storysmith

sounds reasonable to me, and adds flavor and options to your writing style.

Thank you. It’s actually a big part of his character. He regularly puts himself in danger in my stories to protect those he cares about, regardless of the danger to himself. In fact, my first story with Abirami ends with him taking very dangerous essence-boosting pills just to help his family escape the enemy, which puts him in a coma (which is…[Read more]

@joelle-stone

Aw, thank you! Will do

I am actually near the end of this novel. Just one more scene, then the final battle. (and any wrap up after it…) so I may be asking for beta readers soon…

Glad to do it. 😉 and Lorcan is fully healed now too. =) Lots of fun things to come, I don’t doubt… (oh, and Ku is currently sending her bugs out into the castle to map it out. hehe. – well, at least a map of the castle as it currently is… or perhaps even as it changes… hehe hehe.)

Tears…. I just wrote a whole section and lost it again. waaa.

Ok. bah. here we go again… well, at least, for me… here we go… again. :,(.

Abirami

I put on my garb as Ku’Aya stormed in and stomped over to me.

I held my hands up as she wielded her quarterstaff like a painter’s brush. “How dare you throw me! What if my hive hadn’t…[Read more]

I think it’s an awesome visual. In a tumultuous sea, it can very well seem like a dark hand rising up to swat you into oblivion!

That’s awesome and sounds like a great and interesting book!

amen!

no problem. =) I understand.

A proverbial saying of my world…

“A week’s journey can cast a year’s shadow.”