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    Kaytelyn
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    Hi,

    I have written several poems and I wanted to know how good they are and what I can do to make them better. I mostly write free verse poetry but I have tried using words that rhyme, but they don’t sound as good as the free verse. They probably don’t sound as good because they were like the first few I ever wrote and I didn’t know the rules of poetry (not that I know them now), but I have been told that free verse poetry doesn’t have any rules. I am going to be putting them in the order that I wrote them.

    Natures Warning

    Stars twinkling

    in the night sky,

    the moon gives off

    it’s nightly light.

     

    Clouds drift all around,

    over the moon and the stars,

    as the wind whispers and says

    “A storm is coming.”

     

    The light house says,

    “Be careful! Be careful!”

    as the fog comes in,

    “Look out! Look out!”

    as the water get’s angry.

     

    The lightning flash’s

    in the distance,

    the thunder roars it’s warning

    as the storm comes closer.

     

    That is the fourth or fifth poem I ever wrote and this next one is the sixth or seventh one. I wrote it last spring.

     

    Spring is Here

     

    Daffodils are blooming,

    with tulips of reds and pinks.

    Humming birds sipping up nectar,

    well a stream runs through.

     

    The buds on the trees grow rapidly,

    rain falls at it’s steady pace.

    Butterfly’s flying, enjoying their freedom.

    Well a mountain watches over them all.

     

    Birds chirp and sing,

    as they build their nests,

    as they follow their songs.

    Flowers opening and coming up,

    to add their color.

     

    Birds sing and

    finely say, “Spring is here!

    Spring is finely here!

     

    This next one is my favorite out of all three poems. I have never really seen a sunrise but it’s still my favorite. This is the eleventh or twelfth poem, and then I wrote nine poems sometime after this one.

     

    The Sunrise

     

    Sitting near your window,

    watching for that little bit of hope.

    The magical glow from the

    eastern sky.

     

    A light is waking up

    to shine it’s tiny rays,

    to chase away the clouds and fog

    and make the day a brighter one.

     

    A bit of light shows in the eastern sky,

    but further away it’s quite dark.

    waiting for that bit of color

    and for the warm rays of light

    to reach across and touch your face.

     

    A ball of orange fire shows,

    and the sky seems to turn a different shade.

    As it travels a little further

    pink and purple show their face,

    and you wait for the final color.

     

    The colors blend together as

    the sun slowly climbs higher and higher.

    Finely yellow warmth is at the top.

    Closing you eyes you feel the first

    drop of warmth, hope and light

    as the colors fade away.

     

    Those are the three poems. I would like to know what I can do to make them better, what one is the best and also if possible what words I use the most. I want to be able to write better poems. If I know what one is the best, I am hoping that I can figure out what makes it better and how I can use that in other poems. Plus knowing what words I use the most will tell me what words I need to find other words to use instead.

     

     

     

     

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