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Renner and Erin

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  • #121377
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

      Renner stared out the window of his little hut. His fists were clenched in anger. He reached up and wiped his streaming eyes on the back of his sleeve.

      He hated his family, he hated Jen, and he hated being different. Family doesn’t matter anyway. And if they really loved me, they wouldn’t have sent me away!

      Renner squeezed his eyes shut and leaned his head on the glass. His necklace swung forward and hit the window. The small clink made him open his eyes, the locket had opened and he could just see the picture of him and his little sister. Grief stabbed his heart and he sobbed. Why was it so hard?

      “Why can’t I just forget them!?” He sank to the floor and sat there for what felt like hours.

      His gaze drifted around the room and landed on the picture of Jen. Why did he still have her stupid picture? He stood up and walked over to it. His vision started to blur and soon he was back at the door of her house.

      Renner pounded on her door and stepped back, waiting for her to come out. Soon the door opened to reveal her father. “Renner, what are you doing here so late?”

      “I have to speak with Jen, please!”

      Her father backed away from the door still watching Renner and called Jen. A couple of seconds later she appeared wearing her sweatpants and a t-shirt. “Renner, what’s wrong?!”

      “I have to speak to you. Alone,” he added.

      Jen smiled at her father then walked out, closing the door behind her.

      Renner’s heart beat to fast as he told her. Jen’s mouth opened in horror and she started to back away, shaking her head.

      “Jen wait. What are you doing? You’re my best friend!”

      Jen shook her head one last time. “Go away. You have to leave!” she almost screamed. Then she turned and ran.

      Renner’s cry for her to stop was lost as she slammed the door behind her.

      Renner jerked back to the future. “Why would you do that to me!?” he yelled.

      He grabbed her picture and flung it across the room. The glass shattered as it hit the wall and the picture fell to the floor. He knocked his books off the table then picked up her picture and ripped it into pieces. He hated her.

      There will be more to come! If people comment on this one lol!

      Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉

      #121378
      Beth Darlene
      @beth20

        @eitan @claire-h @purpleturtle @olivia Let me know if you want to be tagged or untagged!

        Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉

        #121379
        PurpleTurtle
        @purpleturtle

          @beth20 Wow! That really left me in suspense! Yes, I want to be tagged!

          "It is not the strength of the body that counts but the strength of the spirit" ~ J.R.R. Tolkein

          #121380
          Beth Darlene
          @beth20

            Wow! That really left me in suspense! Yes, I want to be tagged!

            Awesome, thanks!

            Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉

            #121386
            Claire
            @claire-h

              @beth20

              Oh I really liked that!! I like the sensory details you provided. Great work, now I want to read more. 🙂

              a flower does not think of competing with the flower next to it.
              it just blooms.

              #121387
              Beth Darlene
              @beth20

                Oh I really liked that!! I like the sensory details you provided. Great work, now I want to read more.

                Thanks Claire!! If you want, I’ll tag you when I post more

                Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉

                #121446
                Claire
                @claire-h

                  @beth20

                  Please do 🙂

                  a flower does not think of competing with the flower next to it.
                  it just blooms.

                  #121451
                  Beth Darlene
                  @beth20

                    Please do

                    Okay!

                    Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉

                    #121521
                    Beth Darlene
                    @beth20

                      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1azUDGNUQAMq3YSd8Htqyzp8y0nE0b6-9xxjmrSFciWU/edit Some on Erin’s past! (she will appear in the story a little bit later lol)


                      @purpleturtle


                      @claire-h

                      Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉

                      #121522
                      PurpleTurtle
                      @purpleturtle

                        @beth20 Thanks! Very interesting…. I want to know more! It really pulls you in.

                        "It is not the strength of the body that counts but the strength of the spirit" ~ J.R.R. Tolkein

                        #121523
                        Beth Darlene
                        @beth20

                          Thanks! Very interesting…. I want to know more! It really pulls you in.

                          Thanks!

                          Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉

                          #121536

                          @beth20

                          That’s super interesting to read, so I’d totally want to read the rest of it if that’s okay with you! Can’t wait to see what it’s about!

                          I have been really busy lately because my family just moved to another house, and my schedule has been really full, but I’ll try to make some room to read it. 🙂

                          Even the smallest person can change the course of the future.
                          -JRR Tolkien

                          #121537

                          Hey @claire-h and @purpleturtle! Haven’t seen you guys around in a while, though that’s probably because I haven’t been around much myself. Lol.

                          How are ya doing?

                          Even the smallest person can change the course of the future.
                          -JRR Tolkien

                          #121560
                          Beth Darlene
                          @beth20

                            @olivia

                            Hi! Man, that sounds stressful, I’ve never moved. Thanks! I will keep you on the tag list! <3

                             

                            Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉

                            #121564
                            Claire
                            @claire-h

                              @beth20

                              Very interesting backstory! Can’t wait to learn more about the characters. 🙂


                              @olivia

                              Hey Olivia!! 👋 Great to hear from you. 😊 Wow I’m sure you’ve been busy with moving! What made you guys move? I’ve been pretty busy myself… I took it upon myself to audit a seminary NT Greek class. It’s been very intense to say the least. 😂 The teacher covers a chapter every 3 days. But it’s been super cool to read a little in the Greek NT! Unfortunately, a lot of things (like writing) have been on the back burner. XD I feel like I only have time for Greek and violin every day lol. Have you been up to anything fun with music?

                              a flower does not think of competing with the flower next to it.
                              it just blooms.

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