Mr.Trip Williams

Jade

Ugh.

Her plan had been as perfect as circumstances would allow. Everything was even ready. But as Jade stretched at the back of the stage, a wrench threw himself into her plan. Given the weird metal clothing the guy wore, ‘wrench’ described him perfectly. In and of himself, he wouldn’t have been a problem. Now that he was staring down Abira…[Read more]

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Saevus stared at the wolf-thing which had just sprayed him with ice. Roaring out “I will make you my pet, beast!” He charged forward, swinging his sword. Abirami jumped out of the way, and Saevus’ sword swooshed over head and blasted into the wall, creating a huge explosion of rock and dust. One wave of his hand, and dust clear…[Read more]

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@calidris

Lol YES Totally within character, though maybe something more like “I shall make you my slave forever, scum!”

Saevus stared down at the fool who had dared start an argument with him. “I will make you my slave forever, scum!” He roared. He charged past Kit and swung his sword at Abirami. He dodged, and the sword s…[Read more]

@jared-williams

Yeah…I know…I’m wondering if I can get it to the point where Saevus learns that the castle basically has its own powers, and he’ll end up challenging the castle itself lol

@calidris

Saevus looked at this youngster long and hard. The fact that he looked back and didn’t look down because he couldn’t take anymore was shockin…[Read more]

@jared-williams

 

I’ve actually got a lot of flack for having the three kids there in that scene. I am thinking of rewriting that whole scene so either there are no kids, or perhaps keep the teenager and the kid but trim it down a lot… not sure. Any suggestions there would be greatly appreciated!

Trimming it down would help, I think.

but I thi…

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@inkhorn

Conroy sounds great! I’m sure he’ll be an interesting addition to the Castle.

@ethan-leonard

I wonder if Lord Castle will like Saevus or not…

@jared-williams

Jade gracefully glided over and stood with her back to me. Her hair smelled of lavender.

Just a little thing, but her hair probably doesn’t smell like that 😂. Honestl…[Read more]

@ethan-leonard

It’d be great to have a new character!

I’ll give you a quick rundown of my other character in the castle, Enydd.

Enydd is in her twenties and has a laidback personality that conflicts with the short spurts of anger that show up when she is under stress. She also is heavily burdened with guilt over a decision that cut her off from…[Read more]

Here are my thoughts concerning Aefflaed’s Weakness:

*Spoiler alert!*

Thank you for putting the pronunciation guide at the front!

It was very easy for me to slip into Aefflaed’s skin in the beginning. The prose there quickly made that connection. This connection continued throughout most of the book, and it was very easy for me to relate to h…[Read more]

@jared-williams

I’m going to put my beta reading feedback in here so it’s not in the Character Castle.

*rushes in and is relieved to find that things haven’t changed much*

@calidris

I think I’m going too drop Basil in again sometime. He’s changed a lot since he was last in here – I’ve finally nailed his backstory and motivations, so that’s changed, but he’s no less of an annoying brat XD

I’d love to see Basil again (never mind that I saw very li…[Read more]

@jared-williams awww I feel so sad for Ku :'(

I know this is probably a spoiler, but will Ku find romantic love?  Or, a close lifelong friend?

I’m sorry but I’ve wholeheartedly adopted her now XD

@jared-williams incidentally, I’ve just recently recovered from a two week long bout of Covid as well XD

Name meanings are so cool!  I used to really be into name meanings, but now I mainly pick names based on the sound or aesthetic.

There was one really cool coincidence though, where I had two opposing characters who accidentally ended up with…[Read more]