@this-is-not-an-alien @obrian-of-the-surface-world @Gracie-J, @lissie-w, @fitz, @jbstanhope @rose-colored-fancy

(I block quoted the beginning because I’m considering removing it)

A brief FYI: a character does say ” if I’m to go to h—, I’ll take some with me”, I know some people are sensitive to the use of the word ‘Hell…[Read more]

Here’s part two!

(I block quoted the beginning because I’m considering removing it)

A brief FYI: a character does say ” if I’m to go to h—, I’ll take some with me”, I know some people are sensitive to the use of the word ‘Hell…[Read more]

Hi!

I’ve spoken a little about my current WIP here I think. It’s a short story under 8,000 words. I decided to post it here to see what you all think! if you want to, I’ll post some questions I’d like answered:

1. does this even…

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Hiyai! I hope you’re keeping well. I’m so sorry for not replying sooner! I didn’t get time to answer your review on my writing, but I will say now that it is absolutely perfect what you’ve written and so so helpful. I really appreciate you taking the time to read over and critique it, it’s so wonderful of you to do that. Thank you so much,…[Read more]

…AND I have added one additional question that goes to the value of this fun exercise. 😎  12 Disciples – 12 Tribes of Israel – 12 Gates in the Heavenly City – 12 – Eggs in a Dozen… (Okay, I’ll admit I got carried away with this last…[Read more]

It’s totally fine, I haven’t been on here in a while either for the same reason.

Ya, I noticed some that he mentions food when they eat. But I didn’t think about it that it’s probably to show the difference between the different cultures of each people group. I like that though.

The growth after a fire is always really lush and I like it…[Read more]

Elina raised an eyebrow. “Magic?”

Magic was used to heal, and in rare cases, to create. So, she supposed that the castle could have been created through magic, although it would have taken ten people at least, all with an immense amount of experience. However, that still didn’t explain how their little group had been…[Read more]

“That’s understandable,” Nadia muttered, probably loud enough to be heard.  Louder, she said “We should probably figure out what brought us all here.  Some magic is my guess, but what purpose or inten…[Read more]

Ok. That makes sense.

Uhhhhhh hello??

Accidentally posted the other one before I was done answering your previous post. xP

Ya, I’m excited, even though I haven’t done much for it yet. I have a friend who’s been blogging for a few years now and I love her blog, so I’ll definitely get her to help me a lot. I agree. It would be better for me to take my time and have everything…[Read more]

No kidding! He does have a lot of songs in his stories, but I sorta like it. If they’re too long then it gets sorta boring, but I like the uniqueness of it.

Wow, that would be so weird to actually see the fires! I saw the place that is only about ten minutes out of town where the fire went through and burned just about everything, and it…[Read more]

Linyang, I will reply on a subsequent post from this one.  Hope you are having a blessed day and I am so glad you are joining us. Each of us are passionate about what we do and there may be times we don’t see eye to eye, but Christ makes us f…[Read more]

Haha, ya, I guess that’s exactly what stories are too. xD So I suppose the only differences between songs and stories are that songs have music and are shorter.

xD That’s hilarious! We don’t get much rain in the summer, which makes so the forest gets really dry. There are often forest fires in the summer because of it, and last summer, my…[Read more]

Hi Fitz,

I wanted to point out some of your very fine statements:

Those particular words “true Love has much more to do with choice than attraction” are very insightful and needed.

Another very insightful statement:

I know you are talking about a fictional character here, but all fiction must be grounded in a deeper understanding of…[Read more]

Hi Fitz,

Per your quote…

…this is not what I intended, however, since we are Christian writers here, we do want to consider the messages we are sending even in our fiction.  It is time we stopped flirting with the world’s ideas of romance and took a good look at the real thing.  I have been married for twenty-one years.  I do th…[Read more]

@irishcelticredflowercrown

Dear Neasa and Fitz,

I have very much enjoyed this conversation. Fitz, you have provided some excellent advice. Too often real people mistake this simple truth between humans:
“Love is in the earning, not in the yearning.”

We are too often attracted to people and things that are the most harmful to us.

I think…[Read more]

So, to answer your question more directly, yes, it can work. Romances are difficult to write but oh so rewarding when done well, and a worthwhile challenge to undertake. I have a lot of thoughts and they are connected somewhere between loosely and strongly, so bear with me if this gets a bit ramble-y XD Also forgive me if some of what I say…

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Oh, by the way, I love your profile picture. 😀 My family and I just finished watching the Lord of the Rings, so it’s now on my mind more than usual. Memes are the best, so it’s a nice combination.

It’s true. Songs are basically just compact stories, or at least sometimes. Other times they are a heart crying out their feelings to the world. That’s more often what my songs are.

Wow, I can’t even imagine not having snow! Well that’s not true. I can, but I don’t like the idea of it. 😛 Haha. My extended family is mostly in Ohio, so when…[Read more]

According to Myers-Briggs, I’m an INTJ-INTP with the pretensions of being an INFP.

I share a commonality with the Apostle Paul in that verse:
For some say, “His letters are weighty and…[Read more]

I can also see your posts. But I felt since I had just posted, better to let someone else go first. 🙂

Huh, strange. Hopefully it didn’t delete anything long term.

Haha, it’s true. Even if I did play more video games, I’d stick with the old ones that I know and like verses taking the time to find new ones.

That’s such a cool quote! It’s not always the case for me, but it is sometimes. Especially when it comes to me not writing songs. (I…[Read more]

I see your posts.

So far so good! 🙂
I did have some difficulties the last few days too, so I have been writing my post in a Word doc before pasting them into the online chat form.  This way if it doesn’t work, you can try again.

Good luck and God Bless!

You are welcome, though I don’t feel like I actually answered your question, lol. Now that I know what direction you are going with it, I have a lot of thoughts about it, if you are interested.

You definitely did, I’m feel like I know what I’m trying to do now 🙂 And yes I would really love to hear your thoughts about this, the floor is yours 😉

Heyy, oh gosh thanks so much for answering my question! I actually totally forgot I even asked you that LOL.

Well, fundamentally, I guess the core question is whether or not you want to include a story arc like that; it is your story after all. The exact nature or unfolding of that arc can always be edited if it clashes with the rest of t…

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Hi Fitz,

I love those ideas.  Doing some work in the Genesis (in-betweens) myself.  If you don’t have one, I highly recommend getting one of those World History Charts in Accordance with Biblical Timelines for your wall.  It has proven to be such a valuable resource to me going back to the early ages of mankind and what followed.  I thi…[Read more]

Ya, I didn’t see your comment on here for some reason, like it disappeared. That’s weird. But anyway, I can still reply because I got an email notification with your answer.

So you like to play video games? I used to play them some a few years ago, but I don’t really anymore. The only one that I play like a couple times a year is…[Read more]

Hi there Fitz! I have your critiques posted below 🙂 thank you for taking the time to do these critiques, God bless!

So, starting with bows. According to https://www.bowhunting.com/bowhunt101/much-draw-weight-hunting/ hunting bows pretty much run the gambit between 40-90lbs of draw weight (how much resistance, in pounds, the bow needs to b…[Read more]

“I am from the world of Epoch, does that mean anything to you?”

Nadia shook her head.  “No, it does not.  And to you, do Kitharin or the Natrada mean anything to you?  Those are the lands my people are from.”

@lonacat @rebekah12 @fitz

Yess! 🙂 Yours are popping up too in here and my email inbox (I have notifications switched on).

I can’t see it either! I saw it upload onto the chat room and then I came back later and it was gone! And a few of my recent posts  have vanished too! Whats going on?

@fitz

Jeepers this is so annoying, I hope you get your critiques back 🙂 Don’t worry, I actually have your corrections saved to a word document so I’m good…[Read more]

Weird, your post came through to my email, but I can’t see it here!

@fitz

I contacted the admins, so maybe we can figure out what went wrong. Really hope you can get your critiques back!

I have the exact same thing! It happened suddenly this morning, everything was just gone, no idea what happened.

Hey, sorry for the disappearance! I was struck by relentless inspiration, so I was very preoccupied with actually writing. (I know, shocking XD)

I think the edge the Victorians have is A) they had years of (less) blemished history to draw from and B) they decided to wear it. Not only that, but have grand paintings of them wearing it. lo…

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Yup!

So… *interrogation mode installed* … what do you like to do in your time? Aka, hobbies?

Hiya again! Don’t worry you’re fine, we all have hectic weeks at some point, so you don’t need to apologise.

Thank you so much for your feedback, I’m very grateful for it! I’m glad you like it! And no don’t worry you’re not too harsh at all, it’s perfect thanks! You made me realise I probably should have given a bit more context into the…[Read more]

I am intrigued by your idea and premise.
I had once thought to write something similar, but only got to a certain point before changing direction.

There is one statement made in the 5th paragraph, I wanted to ask you about.
“The Spirit is perhaps the purist aspect, being the intangible soul, the core of an entity that knows itself and…[Read more]

Thanks! Glad you like her. 🙂

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Elina’s swirling vison slowly began to still, but the dull ache remained. She put a hand to her neck, massaging the sore spot between her thumb and fingers. It helped a little. Satisfied, Elina looked up and was immediately struck with the full implications of her surroundings. This…[Read more]

¡Hola! Welcome to the community of Emberlings!

Oh, I am sure. Especially because it was Greece, and as we know well today, no one can spin a yarn of absolute BS better than a young philosopher or starving artist. lol.

Combining Greek philosophy and artistry nonsense is the absolute worst thing. I love it! XD And the ancient Greeks (And Romans) were second only to the Victorians in terms…[Read more]

Thanks for the link! I read your prologue just there, and wow! So biblical and very imaginative. I could really hear the voice of David Attenborough reading the words. I look forward to reading more of your work 🙂

The thing is about us Irish is that we like to pretend that we tan, and that lots of sun is good for us. That’s been my…[Read more]

Thank you, actually that might be easier if you linked it, I’m still learning how to navigate this forum haha.

I’ve always wanted to go to California myself. I had the chance to go do an college exchange trip but, it was SO expensive so I had to drop my hopes real quick. That’s so interesting, I love meeting people who have Irish/Scottish…[Read more]

HAHA “Well, you see, we don’t know what that skull is, so the black blob really is just our fear of the unknown which we must confront with courage and logic.” – that potter trying to get his piece sold, probably.

LOL, exactly! “It represents the fear of the unknown and the depth of the— Umm– humanity?” I wonder if potters and artists u…[Read more]

Oh excellent, I must see if the prologue is still there! I do love a good old creation story 🙂

Marissa Meyer wrote The Lunar Chronicles, basically sci-fi re-imaginings of fairytales. If you’re into that sort of things, definitely check it out! And Francine Rivers writes Christian romance, her series Mark of the Lion is about Christians du…[Read more]

Pleased to meet you 🙂 I’m very new to this forum, and am excited to be here. The premise of your story sounds AMAZING! So thought-provoking and imaginative. The names are very cool, I myself am terrible at coming up with unusual names haha.

So Marissa Meyer and Francine Rivers are among my favourite authors. Currently I am reading the…[Read more]

I actually didn’t know about that before, lol. I don’t know if it was more or less creative that they just stuck the skull on a black blob instead of creating some goofy looking monster to try and make it work (like the rest of humanity since forever XD )

LOL, I can just imagine a bunch of Greek artists staring at the skull like “Now wha…[Read more]

@rebekah12 Awesome!  She looks super interesting!

“Greetings, Nadia Fabian. I am Glenesh.” He returned the nod, speaking with a neutral cadence. “Are you a native of this place?”

Nadia shook her head.  “Nay, hujor,” she said softly.  It had been a very long time since she had called someone hujor, but this man seemed…[Read more]

HA! we all need inspiration from something, right? Or how about all those mid to late medieval paintings are that are just monks taking out their frustration with their gardens being eaten by snails by depicting them as monsters being slain my the local knights.

YES! I saw those! That’s honestly one of the funniest things I’ve ever seen,…[Read more]