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Hey! I have a couple of free verse (?) (I don’t know if most of them would be considered free verse) poems I’d like to have critiqued, and I’ll be posting more on this topic as they come along. If anyone can help or give their feedback on my poems, that would be much appreciated!

I don’t know too many people on SE, and I don’t know many people here who do poetry except for maybe one or two people; so I’ll just tag them here and also some others that I know from my guild. But if you know anyone else whom you think can help, feel free to tag them too. Thanks!

@ariella-newheart @steward-of-the-pen @silverclaw-bonnetfolly @obrian-of-the-surface-world @elisha-starquill @evelyn

Here’s the first poem I need help critiquing:

“To Those Who Want But Never Give”

To be known,
To be loved,
To be understood in life
Are a few of very many
That all humans much desire.
But to give,
If only that we did,
Then maybe we
Would start to receive
What that we crave so desperately.

Here’s another one:

“Self-consciousness”

Self-consciousness—
That which rips you from the world
And draws you into your dark hole
Which causes you in fear to decay
While the world around you flies past and fades
Which keeps you from caring outwardly
Since too occupied you are with “me”
Which causes you to miss out
On love you are too blind to see.

I’ll post some more later after I get some critique for these poms first.