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Short, short story. 🙂 Any suggestions??

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    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

    The cool wind whipped the light rain into my face. I stood there with my younger sister, my best friend and his brothers. It was dark and the Pacific Ocean stretched out in front of me. The giant waves were crashing together, the sound was deafening.

    It was cold but it was fun so I didn’t push wanting to go inside. A little while earlier Ben and I had wanted to go to the beach but since it was dark my parents hadn’t wanted us to go by ourselves So Ben’s older brother Jon volunteered to take us, Abbie and Sam wanting to come too  followed us.

    Abbie stood a little in front of us and Jon thinking it would be funny snuck up behind her and grabbed her waist, she screamed whipping around she realized it was him and burst out laughing. Joining in, we were soon all in hysterics.

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    #110532
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

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    #110538
    PurpleTurtle
    @purpleturtle

    Very interesting. You don’t get to know the characters enough though.

    "It is not the strength of the body that counts but the strength of the spirit" ~ J.R.R. Tolkein

    #110711
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

    @PurpleTurtle

    True! Though I was mostly just writing that for fun, and just to write lol! It was a writing prompt from a site called The Write Practise, that I did in 15 min. So there really wasn’t supposed to be any character development.  Unless there’s a way to have character development in such a short story (not being snarky I mean this haha.) I was more wanting advice on like my wording and even structure maybe lol.  The story is one of my memories, the people in the story are my friends!

    Thank you for taking the time to respond!

    -Beth

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    #110745
    PurpleTurtle
    @purpleturtle

    @beth20
    Oh, ok! I think it was a good short story! The sentence structure was pretty good. 👍

    "It is not the strength of the body that counts but the strength of the spirit" ~ J.R.R. Tolkein

    #110752
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

    @PurpleTurtle

    Thanks!

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    #110981
    Kristianne
    @kristianne-hassman

    I like it! Nice description and I like the family/friend dynamics 🙂

    Courage, dear heart.

    #110995
    Beth Darlene
    @beth20

    @kristianne-hassman

    Thank you! Yeah they are based on my real friends, good people!!

    Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!

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