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Ella replied to the topic New book blurb – thoughts? in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 4 months ago
Those are both amazing!!!! (I do read epic fantasy, as well as write it 😉) I agree with @arindown and @claire-h that the second one is slightly vague. If you somehow combined them to introduce Exton and his friends/fellow travelers, it would probably be more clear for the reader.
I personally liked the first half the best:
You may hate me when this ends. For the crimes I committed. For crimes I couldn’t dare commit. I have seen the face of God a thousand times and buckled beneath his blows. But I made him bleed as He bled my heart.I am a hero. They say. Have you ever run in terror from your perfect past? Do you dare to kill the Immortal or bring back the dead?
Maybe you could write a transitional sentence after this section, then introduce the characters, setting, and theme of the story…? I just think that a reader would want to know that before reading. The second one was worded beautifully, though!!!!! I would read that book with either blurb!! 😉
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