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@morreafirebird Okay, here are a couple of suggestions. I may come up with more later.

1) First off, I was slightly confused when I read your story as to what was going on with the doorway and all that. I figured it out by the end, but I had to re-read a couple of sections. So that could be clarified.

2) The sunrise could also be more expounded upon. I like the story with the guy, but the sunrise could use a couple paragraphs devoted to it.

(I don’t know if these are supposed to go in the Doc or not…)