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Thank you so much for all your kind words!

I love the tension in the scene and the defiance and resourcefulness of Liorah’s character.  And the weapons,…wow! I am going to need to look those up.

Thank you! I’m glad those parts of her personality showed, I was afraid they’d gotten lost.

The weapons are definitely very cool, though they rather complicate fight scenes XD It was hard to find information on them, but I stumbled upon several videos of shamshir fights, which were fascinating to watch. It really helped me get a feel for it.

I love the imminent threat and the protection she gives to the children while being afraid herself.

Funny story, I was actually planning to cut that out. It was a much briefer scene in the first draft and it kind of hovered in the middle of nowhere. A friend convinced me to keep it in and I’m glad I did. I’m happy it worked out because it shows an entirely different side of her personality.