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Gracie replied to the topic Ninjanaria Chapter Two: Magic? in the forum Fantasy Writers 6 years, 1 month ago
I love how you ended it!!!
I might have a critique, (you don’t have to do anything about it, or, yeah, but)
Can you describe their emotions more? Their actions? (sorry) But it felt like almost a complete dialogue.
Were their stomachs roiling? Chests clenching? Breath coming in short gasps? Hands trembling? (Just an idea) 🙂
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