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@evelyn

Hey! Sorry it took me so long to get back on here.

Commenting on @libby suggestion about taking the ‘and’ before hope, I actually don’t think it would mess up the meter too much. The accent in the sentence is already on the word ‘hope’, the word ‘and’ is simply a pick-up beat (pardon my music terms). It doesn’t really affect the meter to take out the pickup, because it doesn’t have as much weight in the meter.

You’ve actually taken out that pickup before. In the first line of the same stanza, “they are merely phantoms”, you start on the accented (stressed) syllable of “they”. The next few lines you resume starting on the pickup (unstressed) syllable.

All that to say, I don’t think it would affect the meter much. It’s not a huge deal if you would rather keep it, though. 🙂