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ACK. I totally forgot to post a snippet last week!!

Here’s another one, it’s shortly after the last one.

@i-david @the-fledgling-artist @h-jones @caleb-e-king

So nothing I’m looking for in particular to be critiqued here, just stuff in general. (although am I still using too many italics?)

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Eiri pov

I went over and sat down, staring at the flames. Kor and Jaren were on the other side, laughing about something. I sighed. I didn’t see how they could be so happy with all that been happening. I missed my friend, Marasiah, and my parents. I wished that somehow everything could just go back to normal. It was hard to believe that just two weeks ago my life was fine. Two weeks ago I was just an ordinary girl with an ordinary life. I’d been talking with Marasiah when the “news” came. The news that had changed my life. I kept gazing at the fire, mesmerized by the dancing flames, as I recalled what had started this whole mess. It had begun back when me and Marasiah were holed up in my room, hiding from Korzen. We were talking about pretty random stuff, when she said the most surprising thing I’d ever heard.

“Your brother’s kinda sweet ya know.”

I just stared at her. “What??”

She stared back. “You heard me.” I was astonished. I’d never thought I’d hear anyone say that to me in a million years, much less my best friend. She laughed at the look on my face.

“Don’t worry. I don’t like him or anything. But he is sweet. And funny,” she mused.

I finally found my tongue again. “Are you serious? My brother?? Korzen Evermore? Are we even talking about the same person here? His antics are most definitely not funny. How in all of Ash could you think that he’s actua-” I was interrupted by a knock on my door. It was my aforementioned twin.

“Hey, Eiri?” he said, poking his head in through the door. I sighed in relief, thankful for the distraction from the awkward conversation.

“What?”

“Mom wants to see you. Both of you,” he quickly added. I looked at Mara. Mom wanted to see both of us. That by itself was an interesting development, but sending Korzen to come get us probably meant that mom wanted him too. I nodded and we got up from where we’d been sitting on my bed. The three of us went downstairs and my eyes widened. Jaren was waiting for us too. This was definitely going to be interesting. Then I saw mom. I stopped in my tracks. She looked tired, sad, and… extremely worried. Mom was always upbeat and happy, much like Kor. To see her looking like this was… a surprise to say the least.

She saw my expression and gave me a weak smile. “Eirivia, I’m fine. Everyone have a seat.” We all filed into the dining room and everyone except mom sat down. She took a deep breath and started speaking,

“Children. I have some grave news.” She looked at me and Kor sadly. “You’re going to have to leave. The war is coming closer.” Everyone was shocked. I didn’t know what I’d been expecting, but it certainly wasn’t this. I spoke up,

“I thought the war was only rumors, tall tales. And now you’re telling us that it’s actually happening?” My voice rose a little on the last word. Everyone turned toward my mother, completely silent, waiting to see what she would say. The tension in the room was nearly unbearable. I knew what I was hoping mom would say. That it was a joke. A trick, like one of Kor’s pranks. But I knew better, everything she’d said was the truth, even if I wanted to believe it wasn’t.

Mom drew in another breath, I could tell this was hard for her. “The war is real. I-I’m sorry for not telling you sooner. Langor and I… we wanted to protect you. To hide the truth, so that you might… you might have a normal life. And it worked. Until now.”

Langor was my father’s name. I wondered where he was. Knowing dad like I did, I knew he’d have wanted to be here to help tell us. Unless… I gasped in shock. Dad’s job was being a peace coordinator. The war must’ve been even closer than mom was letting on.