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@jared-williams,

WOW. Just… WOW. You have this sense of humor running throughout, and each of the characters are so different that they’re easy to tell apart, though each are relatable too. Your prose is exquisite, and your worldbuilding is incredible!! Which means I need a picture of the tannik’esh. Like now. XD

One word of critique:

I looked back out, but the saliero was gone. A young buck circled the ground at its feet and laid down in the middle of the clearing.

I’m pretty sure the “its” in this sentence means the buck, but when I first read it, I thought you were referring to the saliero’s feet, and it was gone. *shrugs* Thought it was worth mentioning.

“In high elevation volcanoes,” said Yaxkin.

That was so funny. XDDDD I don’t even know why. XD

Thanks for sharing! Tag me if you ever post more. 😛