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    Hope McClellan replied to the topic Spontaneous Word Wars (for slow writers) in the forum General Writing Discussions 6 years, 4 months ago

    @anne_the_noob14

    From this: Dharin flipped his hood back from his face, revealing a strong jaw and chestnut hair, and leaned his head back against the tree. The moon shone off the soft waves that framed his face.

    To this:

    Dharin flipped his hood back, revealing a strong jaw and chestnut hair. As he leaned his head back against the tree, the moon shone off the soft waves that framed his face.

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