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E.B. Raulands replied to the topic Lyrical Poems are Welcome here! in the forum Poetry Discussions 8 years ago
@dakota
You did a wonderful job with this song! The one suggestion I have is to maybe change light to embers in the line “Splashing light everywhere” to add some assonance and help it flow a little more smoothly.
I’d love to hear this put to music! (I was singing along as I read but am not sure I got the tune right. 🙂 )












