Story Embers | duskflower | Activity https://storyembers.org/members/duskflower/activity/ Activity feed for duskflower. Mon, 25 May 2026 03:00:53 -0400 https://buddypress.org/?v= en 30 hourly 2 f272bdf75cc61fd92dd62ded2fb2eace duskflower joined the group Fantasy Writers https://storyembers.org/activity/p/96043/ Wed, 10 Nov 2021 23:12:23 -0400 0 5ebcef4134eb433f52b4448f1fe22a38 duskflower posted a new activity comment https://storyembers.org/activity/p/73420/#acomment-77199 Wed, 08 Apr 2020 20:28:50 -0400 Hi! I’m sorry for being so flaky on you. Is it still at a state where my feedback would be useful? The last two months have been an exhausting mess of school and health issues, but I’m on spring break now (and, as you can guess, my schedule is VERY empty) and would be happy to do some reading if that’s still what you need!

In reply to - Zachary Holbrook posted an update @duskflower Here’s the link to the first 14k of the second draft of ‘The Lore of Yore’. I’ve expanded it significantly, adding a lot more depth to Keylori’s character and her […] ]]> 7e91721c901fd401212369763c5c5fe5 duskflower posted a new activity comment https://storyembers.org/activity/p/67276/#acomment-71934 Wed, 22 Jan 2020 23:30:15 -0400 Hi! I don’t think I ever received the extended version (or I lost it). So glad to hear my comments were helpful! I would love to see the changes you made in the second draft when it’s ready. Until then, I’m happy to wait so I can make fresh comments (instead of saying the same thing over and over again for a hundred pages). Looking forward to it! 🙂

In reply to - duskflower replied to the topic The Lore of Yore– First Three Chapters in the forum Critiques Hi! I wasn’t able to fit all my thoughts into the comments so I’ll finish them here. 1) I really like Keylori. It’ […] ]]> 733e4c5b729794266dc978b588f59b13 duskflower replied to the topic The Lore of Yore-- First Three Chapters in the forum Critiques https://storyembers.org/activity/p/67446/ Fri, 25 Oct 2019 03:04:48 -0400 @toklaham-veruzia

Messaging a docs link would be perfect, if you feel like the story is already ready. Let me know if there’s anything in particular you want me to be focusing on – specificity would really help me know what to comment on!

]]> 0 fa026873c7f7ef8cd4137a82d19fc1b0 duskflower replied to the topic The Lore of Yore-- First Three Chapters in the forum Critiques https://storyembers.org/activity/p/67276/ Mon, 21 Oct 2019 23:13:24 -0400 Hi! I wasn’t able to fit all my thoughts into the comments so I’ll finish them here.

1) I really like Keylori. It’s interesting beginning with a character who is already in a position of command. Right now, it almost seems like it’s about to be stripped from her and she’s going to have to find her identity without it. If so, that would definitel…[Read more]

]]> 2 c2683a581bda5acbf2a69f8fe17ed424 duskflower replied to the topic My Fox needs to Realize that he can Lie. in the forum Plotting https://storyembers.org/activity/p/67118/ Wed, 16 Oct 2019 22:03:56 -0400 @camohunter19

I agree with Naiya – it seems like lying comes out naturally under stress. I would say maybe he answers a simple question tentatively or accidentally with the wrong answer, or maybe he doesn’t say anything at all (or just stammers) and the others naturally assume that he saw God (or whatever his lie is), causing him to realize he…[Read more]

]]> 0 9da2ba9f8dce162ff9f20afaa48dd3fe duskflower started the topic Slap some words on that paper! (game) in the forum Knaphollow Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/67099/ Wed, 16 Oct 2019 15:57:18 -0400 Hello, hello, my fellow adventurers (sleepy as we may be)!

So, when I’m in the planning stage of a draft I have a bad habit of getting SO caught up in outlining and theme and fancy things like ~*~subtext~*~ within my novel that I forget to keep my skills sharp and practice actual prose.

So here’s a game to fix that, and maybe wake us up a lit…[Read more]

]]> 0 9e3dfd2319655a28d4afcf58445f3baf duskflower replied to the topic Sleepy Knaphollow in the forum Knaphollow Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/67091/ Wed, 16 Oct 2019 14:47:30 -0400 I confess I’ve been dormant for…months, as school and life has been ganging up on me. But the ache for storytelling community always sets in and I’m grateful I have a place to go back to. *plops down bags*

 

Here I am. It’s good to be back. I’ll put on the kettle. Does English Breakfast sound good to everyone?

]]> 0 4231b05da21156cdeb837f63c8dc9d31 duskflower replied to the topic Genre Mashups in the forum Knaphollow Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/67090/ Wed, 16 Oct 2019 14:43:11 -0400 This is an awesome idea! I’ve been busy all of October and I think I’ll try to squeeze in some time to recuperate and do something fun with this! I think I’ll try out the Paranormal Fairytale. I think I’ll experiment with a fairytale-type prose style with traditionally paranormal creatures. Maybe it’ll be like a George Macdonald tale set in modern…[Read more]

]]> 0 f4b9bfe4cfede38a9c68d2fc50bc30aa duskflower replied to the topic Developing consistent writing habits in the forum Weekly Theme Discussion https://storyembers.org/activity/p/56601/ Mon, 29 Apr 2019 14:05:19 -0400 I feel like perfectionism is the enemy to good writing habits. I’m on a third draft point where I’m trying to make everything as *perfect* as possible and when life is hectic and the very act of carving out writing time is difficult it just cripples my flow. I feel like until I have more free time the very wanting to tell a good story is kee…[Read more]

]]> 0 530c09d3594f90b8bb6d63898f4bcd3b duskflower replied to the topic How to organize alpha and beta readers in the forum Weekly Theme Discussion https://storyembers.org/activity/p/52501/ Sun, 24 Mar 2019 21:04:19 -0400 I’m so excited that beta readers are being set up! I’m always in need of good beta readers and would be glad to do the same favor myself! Looking forward to the next post about being an excellent beta reader ^_^

]]> 0 afa02cb9e9b3efc5a1a69727a4ce1b60 duskflower replied to the topic War Winners! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/50177/ Thu, 07 Mar 2019 18:27:59 -0400 That’s amazing! Great job, everyone!

 

Edit: we have a guild emblem now? That’s fantastic! I love it, totally my aesthetic as a hiker/backpacker with a great fondness for purple. I’m so happy I was placed in Knaphollow ;D

]]> 0 43a67540b701ea4d8001eb93c450e11b duskflower replied to the topic Grab Your Knapsacks and to Arms! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/46992/ Sun, 10 Feb 2019 22:34:51 -0400 Yeah, the story has to be very short and simple. I’d say one character can be developed, and any others can barely be described. I’m not sure if even dialogue is a good idea.

 

]]> 0 da619928062c66f20380dfaa74162a95 duskflower replied to the topic Greetings! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/46598/ Fri, 08 Feb 2019 06:24:24 -0400 Welcome, new friends! We’re excited to have you join our merry little troupe of Knaplingers. 🙂 It’s an excellent time to join us, great things are afoot!

]]> 0 7fd10e346a4aa214d0b06c6dda5a8d34 duskflower replied to the topic Grab Your Knapsacks and to Arms! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/46597/ Fri, 08 Feb 2019 06:18:27 -0400 I’m so excited to see Knaphollow rise up and go to war! So proud of you guys and excited to see what we’ll accomplish together!

I have a few ideas:

– @kari-karast

I’m always down for a good animal POV, but the ending itself seems too predictable. Maybe, to twist it a bit, the animal doesn’t return home, but realizes that the world outside…[Read more]

]]> 0 073aeb5080fd361e530ef316fc982f44 duskflower posted a new activity comment https://storyembers.org/the-undertakers-son/comment-page-2/#comment-2326 Wed, 23 Jan 2019 22:52:24 -0400 Absolutely beautiful without being trite. The hope shines all the brighter for being tempered with sorrow. Well done, Anne, it was a delight to read!

In reply to - Story Embers wrote a new post By Anne of Lothlorien   I built my first coffin when I was thirteen years old.   Father said it wasn’t good enough.   I built another. And another. For five year […] ]]> a98b3462ace3bfb2125ffe434f5f6f10 duskflower started the topic What part are you stuck on? in the forum Knaphollow Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/42701/ Wed, 23 Jan 2019 05:14:02 -0400 Currently rewriting an argument scene that tears two characters apart and I’m trying to make sense of their pockets of anger, bitterness and resentment. Which, of course, means even more forays into their psyches and figuring out why they feel the way they do and how I can translate that into the argument. Sometimes things like this are far more…[Read more]

]]> 0 f69471f3fbb3703c022959b67d16d73d duskflower replied to the topic Anyone else editing/rewriting? in the forum Accountability & Achievements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/39364/ Mon, 07 Jan 2019 19:43:26 -0400 @daeus-lamb Nice to hear from someone on the other end of the process! That’s what I’m reminding myself!

@maddiejay I’ll definitely check out that book! Thanks for the recommendation!

@kb-writer I’m beginning to identify the theme in my story, too! It feels like squinting at a marble block until you can see the makings of a statue hidden inside,…[Read more]

]]> 0 c3f547f849d50e49de9656add7333deb duskflower replied to the topic Animal POV Fiction? in the forum General Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/37915/ Mon, 31 Dec 2018 18:46:22 -0400 @eden-anderson Though I’d love to hear from other Christian writers who have tried it, the way my faith is woven in is definitely in a very different way from other novels.

As anthropomorphized as they are, they’re still animals and I agree that it’d be odd to have organized religion in an animal story (-sighs pointedly at Warrior Cats-) but…[Read more]

]]> 0 02006162a97edbb677615c647b18b14a duskflower started the topic Anyone else editing/rewriting? in the forum Accountability & Achievements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/37774/ Sun, 30 Dec 2018 04:36:52 -0400 I’m on my third draft of my main novel project (the first draft being a super messy NaNoWriMo draft, the second draft just being a clean-up of the first draft and a small rewrite and this third draft being a large-scale rewrite and restructuring) and it’s..hard. I love getting to know my characters more and seeing things improve, but the…[Read more]

]]> 0 1cb08fa2c956f55e86491b754b8fa2fc duskflower replied to the topic I Promise I Still Love LOTR… in the forum General Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/37772/ Sun, 30 Dec 2018 04:24:41 -0400 I love the ending because it shows the hobbits finally standing up for themselves and being different, in their own homeland. It’s the culmination of their arc! Of course, I’m biased because I adore the trilogy and don’t like it ending, so it’s VERY nice for me that it takes forever to end. I can take my time 🙂 My favorite anecdote, though, is…[Read more]

]]> 0 a11b62ca70b43c654997f6d7e736c79e duskflower replied to the topic Animal POV Fiction? in the forum Knaphollow Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/37768/ Sun, 30 Dec 2018 04:10:51 -0400 Edit (since I can’t edit the original topic): I put the general discussion in the main discussion, but I’m still curious to see if there are any fellow Knaplingers who write animal POV fiction! If so, I’d love to be a critique partner with you!

]]> 0 674701973ef6e39cd96f6a44d847871a duskflower started the topic Animal POV Fiction? in the forum General Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/37767/ Sun, 30 Dec 2018 04:08:32 -0400 It’s uncommon enough that I doubt there are people who do write this, but it’d be totally awesome to find people who did! Animal Fiction/Animal Fantasy is from the perspective of an (anthropomorphized, to varying extents) animal. Other than that, there’s not any real requirements. Some of them feel more fairy-tale like and talk to humans, other…[Read more]

]]> 0 67bf3364c5719a31f46046798b3d1907 duskflower replied to the topic What Are We? in the forum Knaphollow Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/37756/ Sun, 30 Dec 2018 03:54:52 -0400 Knaphollow brings to mind lush, old-growth woodland, picnics beneath the trees and hobbit-style adventures. I think of Haldir from the Fellowship of the Ring (book), camping and feasting beneath the stars in a hall of trees, always on the move and yet always at home in the woods. The name itself sounds very cozy and makes me think of tea, books…[Read more]

]]> 0 6158367c4d27aab1c168b910d9176dd2 duskflower started the topic Animal POV Fiction? in the forum Knaphollow Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/37753/ Sun, 30 Dec 2018 03:51:30 -0400 It’s uncommon enough that I doubt there are people who do write this, but it’d be totally awesome to find people who did! Animal Fiction/Animal Fantasy is from the perspective of an (anthropomorphized, to varying extents) animal. Other than that, there’s not any real requirements. Some of them feel more fairy-tale like and talk to humans, others…[Read more]

]]> 0 e7d2f3d79635113f495723a3ea88b6ab duskflower replied to the topic Deep character analysis in the forum Knaphollow Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/37746/ Sun, 30 Dec 2018 03:26:37 -0400 Protagonist A is actually a wolf and rather young, ranging from 1-2 1/2 years over the course of the novel. She’s at the peak of her reckless adolescence, and a little overadventerous. Protagonist B is also a wolf of the same age, and he’s far more cautious and fearful. I love both of them. If anyone has any questions, or they don’t seem like…[Read more]

]]> 0 00fa9c80ad2c4150a7a7b7c9e9272d2d duskflower replied to the topic What Are We? in the forum Knaphollow Writing Discussions https://storyembers.org/activity/p/35781/ Mon, 17 Dec 2018 05:31:01 -0400 It does have a lot of language, but we watched it with VidAngel so it was all muted! I’m not a fan of thriller or have much of a stomach for violence so I found it difficult to watch at times, but the plot and characters are both amazing and it does a good job of being very, very engaging.

]]> 0 01d42df4c57e2a8da01d6c14f3d91da8 duskflower replied to the topic Welcome! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/35780/ Mon, 17 Dec 2018 05:27:58 -0400 @maddiejay

Ahahahaha I love that. Steve really was the world’s best teenage boy mother. I will call you Mom-Steve from now on ;D That’s such a cozy image for the hollow! I love it!

@kari-karast

Ooo! My absolute favorite Lord of the Rings characters are Faramir, Aragorn and Eowyn, by far (though I love so many), with an honorary mention to Tom…[Read more]

]]> 0 247d8d04bd76ba682bc8c69440a31d75 duskflower replied to the topic Welcome! in the forum Announcements https://storyembers.org/activity/p/35560/ Sun, 16 Dec 2018 07:42:04 -0400 So good to finally be in a good. A (late) hello! I’m Dusk, I’m a teenage homeschooler who loves storytelling, the great Outdoors and the creatures in it and all things Tolkien. I love the name Knaphollow, it gives me Green Hollows (aka Ban Rona from the Wingfeather Saga and one of my new favorite fictional places) vibes and I love it. Is ther…[Read more]

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