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I don’t feel like the best person to give advice, but it sounds to me like you probably have enough foreshadowing. You have Jake somewhere where experiments on done on convicts, while Felix is a convict who had experiments done on him. You have the little bits of hinting, etc. Also, until you get close to the climax, it’s pretty expected for new characters to appear. Since you say once they escape the prison, they go on an adventure together, it sounds like they meet in the first half or so at least. I’d say you have enough set up already to just introduce him however you want. If beta readers further down the line have issues, then you can look it over again.
Many people don’t like it when you call them ‘u’, because they say it makes them feel old XD
That reminds me of how things are here in the Southern US. It really makes you feel old to be called “Ma’am,” but that’s what you grow up getting drilled into you to say.
My favorite at least at this point is Reaper. She named herself after the mythical Reaper of Souls since she is extremely stealthy and excels at picking locks, so she has a way of getting into places that “Only the Reaper of Souls” could. She is rather mischievous and tries to figure out what animal everyone she meets is most like. She endured some trauma in her past and joined an assassin guild in a misguided effort to get used to killing so that she would be able to get revenge. Along with that, she adopted a sort of persona based on the Reaper of Souls theme and likes referring to herself in the third person as Death. Some of her most-used lines are “Death sheds no tears” and “Death has no ties.”
She has a lot to learn about true strength and being willing to make friends again, but she does enjoy messing with people.
A lot of the fun with her is in how she interacts with the others. She gets in an argument with one character about what’s the point of saluting, and another argument about why should you knock with someone is already expecting you.
I think I’m going to be changing my opening scene, but I really love the first line I have at the moment:
“Reaper leaned back against the fallen tree and clenched her eyes shut against the foreign stars.”
I don’t have a ton of experience, but one thing I’ve been trying to do while figuring out my plots is to see what steps are required for the antagonist to accomplish his goal and what steps are required for the protagonist to either accomplish his goal or stop the antagonist from accomplishing his and then distribute those through the middle so that there is a sense of stuff moving in either a positive or negative direction. This also helps with figuring out things for the antagonist and protagonist to do during the plot.
This may only work for certain story types though, and I’m still trying to figure out my own plot and what works for me, so results may vary.
