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@missfaeriekaiti Oh, goodness! I just realized that I was so excited to share my excitement of your story that I totally forgot to share my thoughts on your setting!!

I would have liked more setting in the cottage, perhaps before the dabnors arrived. I loved the fire and the emphasis on warm and cold were excellent, but what else? Was the table old and worn, dark wood or light? Were there quilts hanging on the walls or were they bare? Was there a woven rug to cover the floor? Did she get splinters from picking at her chair or was it polished smoothly? Did the smell of her tutor’s supper make her stomach rumble or had she eaten before? (If she had, perhaps it would have clued the reader in that her statement to the priest was odd or unusual or suspicious?) I kind of wanted more orientation in the room.

That said, I think the snowy outdoors was very well done. Maybe you could consider adding just a little more about the dark as well as the cold? Or about the white of the snow and the gray haze of the night or some such? What did she wear beneath the cloak? A dress thinned by use, an evening dress, or perhaps just her normal, everyday chore dress? I must admit, I was a little surprised to hear she was a lady. I didn’t imagine nobility, but a few ideas about her appearance can easily clue the reader in ahead of time. Just a few thoughts.