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  • Ariella Newheart started the topic Critique for my poem “The Sky Realm” in the forum Poetry Discussions 6 years, 2 months ago

    Greetings, fellow poets and writers! My school is having a poetry competition and I would love to enter a poem I wrote called “The Sky Realm.” If you have a chance, I would greatly appreciate thoughts and critiques. The deadline is in about two weeks. 🙂 Thank you!

    The Sky Realm

    Have you ever mapped the endless sky,
    Or stood upon its clouds?
    Have you seen its gilded realm,
    And measured out its bounds?

    Have you watched its fleet of tow’ring ships
    Surmount the stormy winds?
    These moon-chasers, sun-wakers,
    Are every dreamer’s friend.

    Perhaps the sky-king’s snowy-white hall
    Has captured your delight,
    Where the sunset’s lambent hearth
    Glows red with firelight.

    When the heavens weep for joy and grief,
    Its storerooms overflow
    With the sky-realm’s precious goods
    Of ice and rain and snow.

    The kaleidoscopic arc painted
    In every hue of light,
    Shows the brushstrokes of a king
    That make your dreams take flight.

    No mortal artisan’s crowing work
    Could ever be compared
    To the beauty that our God
    Has painted everywhere.

    @steward-of-the-pen @evelyn @cassie-hartfinh @anyone-else

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