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@rose-colored-fancy,

*could listen to your accent all day* *tries mimicking it* *reads your story with you with your accent* *fails miserably*

The best part about this (not including the melodic reading) is that I know who Liorah and Gavril are and I know some of the setting and worldbuilding. *cackle*

Scene Questions:

1. Is there anything that stood out to you as intriguing about this scene?

Just the whole worldbuilding – you put so much work into culture and everything and then only let us see the little details (at least, I think that’s what you do), which makes me want more. The kolye is especially interesting – don’t ask me why. XD

 

2. What would you say the mood was of this scene?

Mood, hrm. Tense, scared, determined.

 

3. What character(s) in this scene would you like to know more about?

Well, obviously Gavril, just ’cause we all know he’s my favorite. 😉 But also Liorah – how old is she in this scene, after all? Like before or after the Castle?

 

4. Which character, if any, do you feel the most empathy toward in this scene alone?

Liorah. Definitely. I know that feeling where someone tells you to go do something and you’re like, “NO! I should be right here!” or where you’re scared but you know you have to act anyway. The whole my-brain-stopped-working-so-my-muscles-took-over scenario. 🙂

 

5. Which of the following, as a reader, do you wish I had developed more fully in this scene?
a. Setting
b. Character thoughts and motivations
c. Character appearance and/or mood expressions
C only. I feel like you did an excellent job with the setting – giving us just enough to get a mental picture but leaving us wanting more ’cause we know it’s there. Liorah’s thoughts and motivations are really clear as well, so yay for that!! 😀

 

6. Do you feel that the dialogue in this scene flows or is mechanical and stilted?

‘Tis very very flowy. I love how Liorah calms the kids down by playing hide-and-seek. (Also, LOVE THE NAMES GIRL!!)

 

8. Did this scene make you want to read more scenes? (Why or why not?)

How do I put this gently? YEEEEESSSSS LET ME READ YOUR BOOK RIGHT NOW ROSE OR I WILL STEAL IT FROM YOU BECAUSE I MUST KNOW MORE ABOUT THIS DESERT PRINCESS AND HER PROTECTIVE BRO BECAUSE IT JUST SOUNDS SO AWESOME!

As for why… I think it’s obvious. XD

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Thanks for letting us read/listen to this, Rose!! ‘Twas a real treat. 😉