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Hi!  I think both blurbs are intriguing.  However, as a casual observer (please note, I’m not an expert on epic fantasy), I really like the first blurb the best.  The structure is similar to what I might see if I was browsing books at a bookstore or on Amazon; BUT it has a great hook, the plot grabs my attention because it sound unique; and the first blurb hints more at what the character’s internal struggle is.  That makes it much more compelling for me to pick off the shelf.

It sorta bugs me when a book’s blurb doesn’t hint at what the internal conflict is, or just gives a superficial/cliche conflict, like ‘they must find themselves’, or something like that.  Both blurbs suggest deep internal conflict; however, I feel like the first blurb defines it better, or rather, makes it clearer.  Also in the first blurb, you hinted that the other side characters would have their own struggles (i.e, a best friend who doubts the MC, which is a cool twist), which adds another dimension to the story to make it stand out.

The second blurb is intriguing because it’s unexpected and catches your attention.  However, I felt a little lost as to what exactly was going on, or who was talking to me.  I agree with @hannahrenner about the 1st person to 3rd person viewpoint shift (that may be what was throwing me off).

I hope this was helpful  🙂  (do you have a release date yet for your book?)