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    Arindown replied to the topic New book blurb – thoughts? in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 9 months ago

    @daeus-lamb

    I have to say that the new one is more intriguing, but I find the first-person voice a little unclear at points. Especially the last paragraph.

    I am a hero. They say. Have you ever run in terror from your perfect past? Do you dare to kill the Immortal or bring back the dead?

    This part (above) is by far my favorite piece. It gives me internal conflict, and the irony of it.

    The first blurb was more clear on what the actual story is about: who the characters are, what the stakes are, and why it matters. The second one sounds more professional and probably gives me more of an idea of the story’s voice.

    Hope that makes sense. I thought they were both really good.

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