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@katja-r

I love it!!!😍 It has so much feeling and emotion. I can almost feel the battle inside of Alyce…or myself, for that matter.😊 You nailed it, girl.

Of course, a story can always be polished up, but the only thing I would say is, I think you can make the last sentence more sudden.  Something like, “I ran for the exit, and shoved the door open. I screamed.” (I don’t actually know if the surprise is good or bad😁). Something shortish, that calls you to turn the page.

Good job. You’ve got me hooked.😆