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@archer360 So, for some reason, I can’t see your reply here, but I have an email that says you did reply. XD So, I apologize for the time it took to answer your questions!

I agree that making their ages clearer would be a good move. You don’t even have to say what ages exactly, just clue us in that he’s a little older.

Yes, I think telling the readers that he found her (as opposed to bearing witness to the event) injured. You could do this by backing up a few minutes, as you suggest, or simply by having him say as much, perhaps to the officer? Or any other number of ways. It would help clear some of the confusion up, and could still leave lots of room for mystery, intrigue, and foreshadowing for the rest of your story. I hope this helps clarify a little…