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Yo, guys!

I hired a blurb artist to make it smashing. He returned this exactly:

In ancient times, the Songkiller sang chaos into the world. Now, he’s returned to finish his dark symphony…

When heroes fall, they pick themselves back up. At least, that’s what the young adventurer named Exton was taught. But when he forges a daring plan to strike at the source of all evil, he risks entering a battle he can never hope to win. Let alone survive…

Luckily, the wizard Ventar agrees to guide Exton and his friends on their quest. But the bitter old man has lost his faith, and spouts dire warnings that God may have abandoned them in their time of need. And being a hero comes at a high price.

As the entity known as the Songkiller ushers in the end of the world, Exton and his friends must risk everything to save all they hold dear. But it’s hard to fight an enemy whose song possesses such a sinister power.

The power to steal one’s immortal soul…

 

I’m eager for your thoughts! Here are mine.

First off, I love the opening line. I feel it’s an improvement over my earlier drafts, though I’d like to trim and tweak some words. I’ll give it a shot.

In ancient times, the Songkiller sang chaos into the world. Now, he’s returned to finish his dark symphony…

When heroes fall, they pick themselves back up. Or so Exton, a young adventurer, thought. But when he forges a daring plan to strike at the source of all evil, he risks entering a battle he can only hope to win, and that at a horrible price.

Luckily, the wizard Ventar agrees to guide Exton and his friends on their quest. But the weary immortal has lost his faith, whispering secretly that God may have abandoned them in their time of need.

As the Songkiller rises with death in his hands, Exton and his friends must risk everything to save all they hold dear. But it’s hard to fight an enemy whose song possesses such a sinister power.

Power over one’s immortal soul…

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