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@caseybold @jenwriter17

Thanks so much to both of you for being happy to beta read my story 🙂 I really appreciate it, and especially all the helpful feedback you both gave.

Quick question –

Did either of you find it confusing when near the end of the book it changes from first person to third person? I have had a few people say it was confusing, however, one of those was translating the story into tok pisin (PNG language) for missionary purposes, so that was probably making it harder to translate. So…was it confusing or did you understand the change of view?

Also, @jenwriter17, regarding what you said about more dialogue and “show don’t tell” – thanks, that made sense. I’m working on adding more of that in atm 🙂 However, I am planning to turn this story into a novel (this one is just the kids’ version 😉 ), so that would hopefully have a lot more of that stuff in 🙂

Anyway, thanks again for reading it for me 🙂