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    Abigail Rebekah
    @abigail-rebekah

      Hi fellow writers,

      So…I’ve finished writing my first kids’ short story (the age range is 8+), and I would love for some people to beta read it for me if you want to xD

      The story is historical fiction, and is about a young boy who is given a poppy seed for his birthday. A couple years later, WWI starts, and he enlists underage. The story journeys through his experiences in both WWI and WWII, and weaves the theme of a poppy throughout the book, as he leaves a poppy seed in every blood-stained battlefield that he fights on, as a tribute to his fallen comrades.

      Oh, yeah…and it’s calledΒ The PoppyΒ btw πŸ˜‰

      The main things I would appreciate getting feedback on would be the flow of the story, theme, if the end is easy to understand, and the main character.

      Please feel free to give any other suggestions πŸ™‚

      Here’s the link to it…you will have to ask for access tho, btw.

      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1IKH2XEx16mvUQ4z_I8W4tm-eSsyKEmBxTAKe_Uy02dU/edit

      ~ Laugh. Drink Coffee. Smile. And Write ~

      #105607
      Jenna Terese
      @jenwriter17

      Hi, @abigail-rebekah! Thanks for letting me know about your story! I was actually going to graciously decline (on account of another beta reading project and other things that are taking up my time), but you’re story sounds too interesting! πŸ˜€ I’d love to read it! I just requested access, if that’s okay. πŸ™‚

      "If you want to change the world, pick up your pen and write." -Martin Luther
      www.jennaterese.com

      #105637
      Abigail Rebekah
      @abigail-rebekah

        @jenwriter17

        Aw thanks so much πŸ™‚ I really appreciate you doing that.

        No worries though if you don’t get to tho πŸ™‚

        Yes, that’s totally fine…I granted access btw.

        ~ Laugh. Drink Coffee. Smile. And Write ~

        #105640
        Caseybold
        @caseybold

          @abigail-rebekah Ooh congratulations! I’m excited to beta read this 😁😁 Requesting permission now 😊

          I'm nobody, Who are you? -Emily Dickinson 뜻이 μžˆλŠ” 곳에 길이 μžˆλ‹€.

          #105641
          Abigail Rebekah
          @abigail-rebekah

            @caseybold

            Aww thanks.

            Granting permission now πŸ˜‰

             

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            #105738
            Abigail Rebekah
            @abigail-rebekah

              @caseybold @jenwriter17

              Thanks so much to both of you for being happy to beta read my story πŸ™‚ I really appreciate it, and especially all the helpful feedback you both gave.

              Quick question –

              Did either of you find it confusing when near the end of the book it changes from first person to third person? I have had a few people say it was confusing, however, one of those was translating the story into tok pisin (PNG language) for missionary purposes, so that was probably making it harder to translate. So…was it confusing or did you understand the change of view?

              Also, @jenwriter17, regarding what you said about more dialogue and “show don’t tell” – thanks, that made sense. I’m working on adding more of that in atm πŸ™‚ However, I am planning to turn this story into a novel (this one is just the kids’ version πŸ˜‰ ), so that would hopefully have a lot more of that stuff in πŸ™‚

              Anyway, thanks again for reading it for me πŸ™‚

               

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              #105793
              Jenna Terese
              @jenwriter17

              @abigail-rebekah

              You’re so welcome! Thanks for contacting me about it. πŸ˜€

              I personally didn’t think that switch was confusing, since there was a clear break with the “***”. I actually liked it quite a bit.

               

              Okay, awesome! πŸ™‚ Thanks again!

              "If you want to change the world, pick up your pen and write." -Martin Luther
              www.jennaterese.com

              #106092
              Abigail Rebekah
              @abigail-rebekah

                @jenwriter17

                Aw thanks πŸ™‚

                That’s good to hear…I’m glad you didn’t find it confusing xD

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