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Hello, @azeline-d. I am new here and write poetry as a starter. So I will firstly be critiquing and complimenting your work. (Not like I’m not, ’cause I’m on here.)

On the whole, your first poem was very well done and I definitely liked it. One note though would be your last three lines; to some people, they may seem somewhat difficult to read – difficult to understand their rhythm. (I thought they fit very well with the poem and closed it off with finality, but that’s just me.) Your meaning was well processed and I thought the idea you were presenting went well with the way you wrote it. To me, reading it, it was sort of like drifting. Almost like that published work on the Blog titled Lost Thoughts. I used to not be able to pick up any kind of rhythm with these kind of poems, but now, for some reason, I get them. I like your form.

With your second poem, I must also compliment you for here the idea you are presenting goes well with the form and style. The fifth line may need revising for it seemed drawn-out from the rest of the poem and almost gave cause for another breath. It also sort of paralleled the teenager of today. That is, on that topic. Teenagers are usually always self-conscious of their looks and what other people think of them. I’m one to know because I’m a teenager too, savvy? (This was not meant to be a comment addressing teenagers to say that they’re weird or anything.)

A tip I would add for any writer/author would be to read of a form of poetry or prose that you wish to write like. It may help to get your mind in the game with your selection of writings.

@silverclaw-bonnetfolly – I understand where you’re coming from here. That line may just be a representation of a typical habit poets tend to fall into. You know, when they’re talking of something but haven’t fully said what it is that they are talking about yet. I do that a lot…it also corresponds with the unidentified form that the poem takes on. So how even in free-verse or blank verse, they’ve got to follow the regulations of that form. As well as the flow…but you all probably know that.

Hope you’re feeling well @banana-peacock-warrior! (Nice name. You like bananas and peacocks?)

With your wording – it went sort of like the way I tend to lean towards when writing my own poetry. In the way that its diversity extended the meaning to the extent that the reader/audience would have to stretch their minds to comprehend it. I love that kind of wording.

By the way, how do you guys add tags on your things?