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Hello!

I’m wondering if I can get some ideas and tips on a poem I wrote. It is a wild experimental poem when I had an idea centering around a Weeping Willow and thought “why don’t I make it full of alliterations”

Let me know what you think! Does it work? Does it feel like a jumbled mess? What could improve it? Did I try to hard to use W? 🙂

 

Weeping Willow

Weeping Willow, why

do you wallow in your wailing

while the wondrous world is waking?

The wren warbles wistfully

as the wind whispers warmly

while it wanders west.

 

Weeping Willow,

you are wilting while you weary.

And what’s worst?

That which you are weeping

is not worth the weight of woe.

 

Weeping Willow, watch

for warmly walks the Woman.

We were well to name her Wisdom

for she wallows not in worry

but wears wings of wisteria.

She is wishing with the wistful

and wary of the whiner.

Her voice wedded with the warble

of the warmly whistling bird.

 

Weeping Willow, listen

for the wayward worker wasted

all the worthy weight of wonder

as he washed his wail in whiskey

and worshiped his own whining.

 

Weeping Willow, watch

for Woman Wisdom walketh

and waits beside your wilting.

Wisdom’s watchful of your woes

and her eyes wear water too.

 

Weeping Willow, why

do you wallow in your wailings?

The world is worse for wear

when the wreckage you must wear.

Cast your woes upon the Worshiped

where wonders are born and watered,

where the worthless one is wanted,

where the water of the wailer

waters wisteria worlds

weaved wonderfully, unwasted

in withstanding love.

 

Tagging @evelyn, @libby, @h-jones to start. Feel free to tag more people.