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@wordsmith –

You’re welcome! I don’t usually have time to review my friends’ works, so this was nice to do. And it was nice that it was shorter too, cause I wouldn’t have had time for a longer one. Well… no, I wouldn’t have.

Keldon/Orion’s ‘betrayal’ of them does make more sense now… I just think that if it were me, what seems to be the first thing that would come to my head would be ‘Oh, Keldon said this is a bad guy, let’s get him!’ I don’t know if the whole things about him using a fake personality for a job and maybe his whole friendship with me was a fake would have occurred to me until later… But thanks for explaining it! It makes a lot more sense now.

About commas… I get that they add comfort to your soul. That would be ellipsis points for me. Ha, if you look at just this comment alone, I have… five sets, including the ones I just did. But even though we enjoy putting those grammatical additions in, sometimes they can not always be proper. As in the basic rules of sentences don’t require them. But yes, I know how hard it is to keep your favorite punctuation marks out of a story. 🙂