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@sarah-inkdragon

I think it’s not bad. You’ve got the situation and problem of the main plot there but I would recommend providing more details and context to give more clarity as to the type of story this is and catch the reader’s interest.

From the blurb, it seems to be an adventure story. I would not have known that it is a sci-fi because to me it could have easily been a fantasy etc. As a casual reader I would not understand from the context what a “Truthseeker” is at all (someone with special powers?). You may want to consider using your blurb to bring your readers into the time and place of your setting. Including some science fiction terms to set the mood and evoke an advanced, futuristic atmosphere will excite sci-fi fans and help them find your story.

The story sounds like it has a standard save-the-world plot. I think you can make it more engaging by making your plot and characters sound more interesting. Regarding the plot, instead of just introducing the grand-scale conflict, perhaps hinting at a possible twist (Maybe Reuel will learn that the peace is a false peace? Maybe Reuel is at risk of going too far?), a powerful antagonistic force (so far the problem seems to only be one assassin and a fragile global power structure) and/or a more personal conflict may also make things more compelling.

“Reuel and his small group of friends” is also not a very exciting way to introduce your main characters. What kind of people are they? Aid workers? Reformed teen gang members? Orphans that grew up together?