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Here’s 200 words I wrote today that I could use a critique on? I’m trying to write out a bit of prehistory on a novel I’ve been working on for forever. Maybe just to get ideas flowing. Not sure where I’m going with it yet.

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Davi Mendosa was not an average museum curator. With his slapdash brown hair and crooked flannel shirt, he looked out of place among the less-than-priceless paintings, especially when he dropped armloads of pamphlets onto the smooth concrete floor. Though Nora couldn’t imagine the Peridot Art Institute without him, she also had wondered more than once how he’d gotten himself there – and if he really belonged in the first place.

When asked about his past, or why he’d bought a museum, or about any of his potentially insane decisions regarding its operation, he would just laugh, which said both everything and nothing at all. On one hand, he could be only what he was – a somewhat crazy immigrant who didn’t know how to say no to a killer deal.

But on the other hand, it could be a sham, and Nora knew it. The absent-mindedness, the unkempt appearance, the frustratingly weak grasp on art history – it could all be a ruse to make people think he was dumber than he actually was. For what reason, though, she couldn’t decide.

All she knew was that she didn’t need any of her degrees to tell that Davi was weird.