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Thanks for the tag, @daeus-lamb !

This reads pretty generically to me. Your first sentence is “Protag is the main character of the same fantasy epic you’ve read a million times, where a Dark Lord is returning and the hero wants to stop him.” And the last two lines tell me “The author is a Tolkien nerd.”

The part that really interests to me is the bit about his mentor being a wizard of wavering faith.

I don’t necessarily think you should tell us what sort of world it is, and I honestly don’t have any useful suggestion for the best way to open, but I think I would like to know both in the beginning and throughout who Exton is, why he has a wizard mentor, and why he thinks he can succeed on the same path that others fell from.

Please keep me updated, I’d love to read more about this!