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Mischievous Thwapling replied to the topic Stories and Fantasies in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 2 months ago
I notice you use the same phrase “creasing her brow.” It felt slightly repetitive.
I love your cliff hanger ending, and how you smoothly portray Nadia as a… *thinks of word* kinda someone who looks out for Ada? Am I interrupting that correctly?
Sorry this critique is short–I’m just not finding any “problems” in y’alls wonderful stories XD (And I’m behind, so it’s kinda a brain overload, haha)












