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  • Miller replied to the topic Poetry critique page in the forum Poets 4 years, 3 months ago

    Hi…!

    So poems are very new to me. I have this poem that isn’t sitting right with me word wise. It doesn’t sound like a poem to me. Now I know nothing about poems, so any advice you could give would be oh so helpful.

    Thank you for your time.

    The Scar

    A lush forest is blemished by this coulee

    A imprudent child is at the bottom of it

    That child cowering in the coulee

    Too petrified to call for aid

    Like a worried mother, You came

    You knew the dangers, yet You still came

    Scarred hands pulled that frightened child close

    Those same hands carried that child out

    And those hands took the pain, the death, and the sin

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