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@beth20

I like it! I’m really getting into the story now 🙂 Just one thing: the point of view changes are confusing, especially toward the beginning. It’s best if you stick with just one point of view per chapter and if you want to change a point of view in a chapter, make sure to indicate it with something like   ***   between sections. You don’t need to worry about losing anything by sticking to just one point of view. You can still show all the scenes of the chapter; it’ll just be from one consistent angle (which makes the story feel more real).