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@beth20

Thanks for pointing those things out. Originally I had written this chapter in present tense and then after I wrote it I changed it to past. So, yeah, I probably missed a few things.

Yeah, I didn’t really like the part about him going inside. I’m going to fix in eventually.

I’ll see what I can do.

Sure, I’ll change that sentence.

Actually, I did mean “take part of the rebellion”. But I think I might reword it differently or do as you suggested.

Thanks for your critique!!

-Katja