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@literatureforthelight Grace I love it! It has a great aura about it and the 2nd person is seamless. Props to you because 2nd person is something I cannot write to save my life. 😛

I added in a few suggestions, mostly word-choice, show-don’t-tell stuff, and I did have a little bit of a hard time figuring out what was going on at the beginning (I thought the woman was the significant figure and ‘you’ was following her somewhere) but that can be smoothed out pretty easily with a few more details or internal monologue from our Death person.

Overall though it’s pretty great. *thumbs up* Nice work!