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K. A. Grey replied to the topic Fresh Poems! in the forum Poetry Discussions 7 years, 11 months ago
@h-jones That is so beautiful. I like the way you left out the capitalization; it’s always neat to be able to create something beyond the limits of English grammar. One thing I noticed was slightly incongruous was how it started as an “afternoon betwixt the walls” and suddenly became the “moon cascading… through the night.” As for the second stanza, at first I thought the last line seemed a little out of place, but reading the whole thing, it kinda ties in with” a wraith of everything i used to be.”
Overall, great job!












