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@mairin-atha Your post got sent to spam for some reason, I think. It does that randomly sometimes. xD

Great snippet though! I really liked how you showed the size of the dad’s hands. That’s a really cool detail.

@faith_blum

Very nice. Something I actually noticed about that snippet is that the sentences don’t flow smoothly into each other because they’re all basically the same length. If you tried to mix up the lengths so they varied a bit more (maybe combine some of the sentences), it might read smoother.

e.g. “Kaylee brushed her fingers through her light brown hair, and tilted her head at her reflection. How could someone smile and still look sad?”