Moira stood at the door, heart thumping. Who would be standing outside her door this time of night? But it was a terrible night, maybe it was one of the neighbors and they need help…

Great! I’m glad everyone is healthy 🙂

Do you both want to get this going again? I’m so sorry for my disappearance, I’ll do my best to not do that again 😉

@vivian-grant Actually a lot of people beta-reading for me aren’t on Story Embers, so I thought it would be easier to just do the same thing for everyone, since everyone has email 🙂 And I’ll post to my blog after the beta-readers have it 😀

Thank you all so much for reading!!

Yes, it did seem a little short to me too. I like the idea about adding more with the sharks so maybe I’ll try that!

And nope, this was not taken out any other projects 😉 This story is all there is! It’s an interesting thought to turn it into a…[Read more]

So I have a super short, fun little piece of flash fiction that I’d like some feedback on! It’s only about 500 words, about a character who argues with the author about his death 😀

(I’m tagging people who have critiqued for me before… If anyone is interested, I’d really like to form a core group of beta-readers to proofread for me…[Read more]

I’m so sorry!! I guess it’s been awhile since I’ve been on Story Embers ‘:) (Life kinda got turned upside down but we’re making it ^_^ How are you both doing?)

Yes!! That’s so cool! I love Dakota! 😀 😀

Okay, first of all, I’M SO SORRY IT TOOK ME SO LONG 🙁 🙁 The last couple weeks have been rough ones, and in all the chaos I somehow forgot all about this 🙁 But I just finished reading the second part!! 😀 (And I KNOW I gave you my comments from the first part, but when I went to look I couldn’t find them? Did you ever get…[Read more]

I’d love to read your story! What’s it about?

Yes, you are pronouncing Bjorn correctly 😉

That’s a very good point about the ships! Thanks 🙂

Would you mind commenting on the grammer mistakes in the document? I definitely want to get those…[Read more]

Here’s the Google Doc!

Let me know and I’ll post the google doc!! 😀 😀

Nono, you pop in whenever 😀 I’m making up things as I go along so I have no plan 😉

Moira squeaked and shut the door.

Who is that??

Hands trembling, she pulled down the bar across the door.

“That is NOT my parents.”

Moira slowly opened the door and peered out into the night.

@pensword @dakota

Moira looked up from the carrots she was chopping. Was that a noise coming from the door? She walked toward the door, taking slow steps. Mother and Father shouldn’t be home yet.

Wow, he sounds really cool :O Falconry sounds awesome 😀

Aw, she sounds so sweet 🙂 I’m going to go ahead and get this started! It’s been awhile since I’ve done this so I might be a tad rusty 😉

*Moira sighed as she shivered, hearing the rain pounding on the roof. She moved across the kitchen and stirred the stew that was bubbling in the fireplace.*

@pensword Sweet!! 😀 😀 Brats make things exciting lol

Aww… That’s so sad! :'( You must have gotten my cold 🙁 But no rush, whenever you’re feeling better and up to it, no worries ^_^

Great thank you!! 😀

Here’s the link ^_^ Tragic Tale

So, I have a character that I’m struggling with a little bit… She just needs to be more fleshed out I think. Does anyone want to RP with me?? I have yet to attempt an RP here, which is very sad because I love RPing! 😀 I’ll have no trouble coming up a situation if needed ^_^

Character: Moira

Genre: Fantasy

Brief backstory: Only child…[Read more]

Hahaha I can relate to that so much XD The story you read started as a short, cute idea about a little boy who is jealous of another guy taking the attention of his older sister, and you know what that turned into 😉

Would you want to take a quick look at it again? I made a couple changes… The biggest one being the flashback near the…[Read more]

I’m so glad!! You’ve definitely made me more eager to work on my story too ^_^ And if there is more to the story I’d love to see how it turns out 😀 I may not always get to it right away, (with life and work and my own writing sometimes it takes me a couple days), but I love doing it ^_^

That sounds so cool!! I’m very interested! 😀 I…[Read more]

Alright, I finished! 😀 I wish I was better at reading and critiquing, but there’s a little there anyway 😉

I’m trying to think of what else I could give you… I’m not quite ready to let people read my WIP because it’s still pretty rough unfortunately XP

Yay! 😀 😀 And, I’m totally up for reading more whenever you’re ready to reveal ^_^

I finally did it!! 😀 And I enjoyed it very much ^_^ Especially once the story got going, after Godfrey almost dies. I left a few comments, not an insane amount because I still have a sick brain that still isn’t functioning all the way XP And like you said, comments are just my opinion so feel free to disregard and they might not always…[Read more]

I’m so sorry that it’s taken me so long to read this 🙁 🙁 After a crazy weekend and now sickness I haven’t been able to, but I really hope I can very soon. (Hopefully tomorrow?)

Thank you!! I may very well take you up on that 🙂 Your comments have been so very helpful! ^_^ I would love to read your manuscript 😀 😀

Exactly!! In my opinion D.O.Ds are just as bad as D.I.Ds. It’s kind of the lazy way out. Like you said, that’s not how most woman act in this world.

And thank you again for reading, you’ve helped me more than I can say ^_^

I got to the page, but I didn’t see any comments :-/

It means sooo much to hear you say that thank you <3 <3

I agree completely with Moira. Fleshing her out has been what I’ve struggled the most with this story. The last thing I wanted to do was make her a blank slate of a damsel in distress, but I’ve struggled with her from the beginning XP

Oh good!! And hey, if you ever need me to proofread anything I’m here! Especially if it’s fantasy 😉

*facepalm* GoogleDocs. That would have been way easier XP Do you want me to go ahead and do that now so you can make comments?

Thank you again for reading!!!! ^_^ ^_^

Robbin threw back his head and laughed. “You’re quick, even when you are half drunk.”

The next day, I looked up at the white sails that reached for the clouds, towering above me. The battered hull, and stern. She was worn, but loved, you could tell. The Avalla, pride of her captain. Or so he told me.
“Aye, she’s been through m…[Read more]