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K ,Iam back from the sick , although Iam not quite free yet …. So I read a few pages , I feel something is off … I’ll tell my concerns here .

1)the setting is off , when I read it I don’t feel like the story is set in space ,tbh I don’t know where the story is set , I only knew after a few pages it was in space …. I thought it was a futuristic world and not space at first …unfortunately idk how to fix it ..

2) need to build the world around or reveal the world a little bit before cause after a few pages i know she is in space and going to crash ,but what I don’t know is how the world around her looks or what means of travel is she in , a space bike or wrap jump or something ….

3)the writing style doesn’t fit sci-fi , the style looks like it’s a drama emotional story but the scene is sci-fi thriller …. Both is exactly opposite to each other . U don’t have drama in sci-fi and less emotion in thriller … Since the writing style and the scene are different idk what genre it is ….

I haven’t read the whole story yet ,so I cannot comment on the plot or story … But those are the concerns I had by reading the first few pages … And first impression is the best impression after all …