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@michael-erasmus

The story sounds good. I feel like you’ll probably write it well because the characters seem to have very clear aims, which helps keep a story cohesive. I like the dad being a dreamer. I could see it either way with the boy.

I don’t know what you think of it, but it could be cool of the pagan gods, while not Gods could still be involved in the story. Like, I believe demons find worship through pagan idols and it might be interesting if they try to keep the dad from switching sides. It could be another villainous force to add to your story and maybe make his conversion more dramatic.

You might want to read Alan Paton’s Cry, the Beloved Country. It about many things like racism and inner-city crime, but most of all I think it’s about the main character’s (an African pastor’s) relationship with God. It’s handled beautiful. Maybe that could give you an image of what it could look like in your story and help you decide whether you want to do something like that or not.