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@katja-r

I really have been enjoying this! I think the thing I noticed the most in this chapter was redundancy. Like at the beginning, you use the word “horse” a lot in a row. So yeah, I think if you just read through and keep that in mind, you could really tighten up your words and paragraphs. Also, for some reason, I felt like there was a lot of extra words in your descriptions… Maybe you got too technical? Just a few things to think about. Mainly just being conscious about being more precise would help. Hope that makes sense! Keep up the good work! 🙂